Shunyou Huang

Outline for rhetorical analysis

Content of my academic text

I. Term paper (as the ultimate assignment)

II. Prompt: did former president Obama done enough to fight ISIS?
A. Position: Obama had done enough to fight ISIS.
B. Criterion
1. Huge investment of money
2. supports from numerous American troops to fight ISIS
3. smart tactics and leadership

Exigence

I. From debate to term paper

A. Topic: Obama had done enough to fight ISIS?
1. Through researches and gathering of resources forming my argument.
B. (Purpose): group debate
1. Debate was a set up for term paper
2. Two main Assignments that affect class grade
a) Weight a lot of points

Context

I. Academic context
A. Current issues (back in 2016-2017)
1. 2016-2017: presidential election (Trump)
2. Obama resigned from office
a) Evaluation on Obamas action during his 8 years (specifically about
terrorists)

Constraints

I. Constraints
A. Format
1. Academic voice
2. Impersonal style
3. Have adequate amount of knowledge in order to construct arguments
4. Length requirement: at least 8 pages
B. Research
1. Comprehension of sources
2. Citing every source that is not a writers original thoughts
3. Organization of sources
 a) Time (from 2009 to 2017)
b) Topics: department of defense, media, etc.
c) perspectives
C. Given
1. The prompt itself
2. Cannot change my position for the prompt

Audience

I. Intended Audience
A. AP government teacher (Mr. Williams)
1. To prove my position
2. To convince my standing in argument
II. Relations to audience
A. Showing readiness for college writing
1. Assignment grading

Writing in major

I. Chosen major: business, MIS (Management Information System)

II. Writing in business : a surprising amount
A. Formats
1. Emails
2. Reports
3. Memos
4. Presentations
5. Business plans
B. Style and language
1. Address topics professionally
2. Error free on sentence punctuations and grammars (expect reports/plans
passed among co-workers)
3. Word choice
4. Sentence structure
5. Visuals (sometimes needed)
C. Content
1. Organized ideas
2. Shows clear logic
3. Message is clearly communicated/persuasive
4. Often with tone of negotiation
5. Avoid being too wordy
6. Precise/direct to point
D. Knowledge
1. Background on studied major
 2. Research (for reports)
E. Factors to avoid/unnecessary
1. Message being too wordy
2. Unorganized thoughts
3. Ideas too vague
4. Lack of knowledge when communicating/negotiating
III. Rhetoric in business major writing
A. Exigence
1. For students in business majors be acknowledged about writing in business
2. Expectations from employers: emails as communication
3. Be aware of the extend of readiness in the field
4. How much writing is needed
B. Context
1. Academic text (the author. Cynthia Linville, is from English department)
2. Writing in job force
C. Audience
1. Students from Sacramento State
2. Students in business major

Discussion

I. Evaluation
A. Shunyous term paper does not fit into the business writing
1. The topic does not relate to anything with business
2. Lengthy
3. Not precise/direct
4. Although message is somewhat clear in the beginning, but it is too confusing to
read about reasons to support
5. Incorrect format
6. Use of language(not professional enough)
7. Lacking of negotiation
8. Abundance of information given
II. Future Improvement
A. Acknowledgments
1. Be aware of audience
i. Who they are
2. Professionalism
i. Clients, customers, directors, firms, etc
3. Understanding in major
4. Use words related to major
B. Content
1. Communicating
2. Negotiation
3. Direct, precise message