Week # 1
June 27st to July 3rd
It’s 4:16 in the afternoon and I am at The National Gallery, waiting for my Iphone, it ran out
of battery and I don’t now what to do, without it I can not go anywhere.
This was my first week in London, I ‘m going to write about every day.
Sunday June 28, after passing all inmigration lines and all I came to marta’s House.It is far
awat from central London, like 1:30 minutes in train, 2 hours in bus and 40 minutes aprox.
In car with no traffic jam.It is a lovely house, Marta loves painting and the house has her
paintings everywhere, she also likes old pictures so the house is full of pictures and some
objets she bring from her trips.
On Monday I stayed at home, I was feeling sick and really really tired,at 4 PM, Rodrigo
Trujillo, Marta’s nephew, He’s Fer Trujillo’s Brother. He lived with Marta since 2010 and
now he’s moving to a town close to London call Stevenage.
On Monday night Dani Couling’s mom invited me to a BBQ in her house at Dollis Hill, that
was my first trip alone in London. I walked to Kingsbury station and there I took the jubille
Line, that one is the newest tube line,. The Transport for London company built it for the
2012 Olympic games, I went down at Dollis Hill station and I walked one block to Dani’s
House. The house is so beautifull and the people who live there are adorable. They have 3
rooms for rent and they live Dani’s mom, Dani’s sister and her husband and the 3 roomates.
On Tuesday I went with the guy from the agency viajes y viajes,to do some stuff, we went to
made ado a Police Registration, because of my kind of VISA, before that he took me to the
school to mademake the registration and afterthen we went to have lunch with her
girlfriend at the chinese neighborhood, then I stayed at Leicester square and I walked alone,
I saw the big ben, the London Eye and at the end of the day I meet Rodrigo and herhis
daughter at the Southbank and we ate sushi.
On Wednesday I went to Lula’s house and hadhave lunch there, with Jose, a guy who works
in Bancolombia and was doing his Masters Degree here, he lives in Lula`s house. We rode
bikes through the union canal until Paddington, there we took Edward road to Hyde Park, at
the park we entered to the Serpentine Gallery and we saw the Serpentine Pavillon.At the
end of the day we made a picnic and the went to visi Lady D memorial, which is a beautiful
water FUENTE?, it represents the infite of life. Yesterdaty, Thursday, I went out with Marta,
we walked to the Tower Bridge, which is amazing and we saw the tower of London, after
hattshe took me to St. Katherine dock, there we had lunch in a TurkeyTurkish restaurant
and after that we went to convent Garden.
Today I meet Dani’s sister, Annalisa, and we had lunch in some park close to Carnaby street
and in the afternoon I went to the national gallery and I took a coffe at PRET a really good
coffe shop and now I am in my bedroom writing this to SEBAS!
Commented [SP1]: Try to be more specific. It’s written
“cannot”
Commented [SP2]: When you are telling only two ideas
try connecting them with “and” instead of comas. “This
was my first week in London and I’m going to write about
everyday”. In english, there’s a need to be more specific,
so instead of writing “to write about everyday” you could
write “to write about what I did every day”
Commented [SP3]: Try to be specific, again, in English
you don’t let information to be interpreted while writing.
“what immigration?” “by train?, where did you go
through?”
Commented [SP4]: If you refer to 40 minutes as an idea,
try using the condition of that idea, not the exception. So
this time it will go like “40 minutes when roads are
fluent, or light on traffic” if you use “with no traffic jam”
you should use the time it takes to get to marta’s when
there’s a traffic jam.
Commented [SP5]: Check this idea. Correct the use of
the period and the capital letters. What about Rodrigo?
Commented [SP6]: This is out of context. Couldbe a
parenthesis
Commented [SP7]: When you use So, you need to add a
complement. “It was so beautiful I could barely stand” for
example. If you just want to say the house is beautiful,
just say “the house is beautiful” If you want to transmit
emotion and exclamation use “What a beautiful house!”
or “The house is such a beautiful one!” remember to
insert the “!” symbol.
Commented [SP8]: Check that, it should be “There”
instead of they.
Commented [SP9]: Fountain, try
www.wordreference.com when looking up for words.