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by Trevor Goehring
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What is the
percentage of
readers in
kindergarten
today?
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Frag.
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2
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Good analysis of
what you learned
during play time!
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students
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Alt hough/However
15 %
SIMILARIT Y INDEX
13%
INT ERNET SOURCES
7%
PUBLICAT IONS
15%
ST UDENT PAPERS
PRIMARY SOURCES
1
www.eric.ed.gov
Int ernet Source 4%
2
Submitted to Northwest-Shoals Community
College
3%
St udent Paper
3
mvcprofsong.weebly.com
Int ernet Source 3%
4
Submitted to North Harris Montgomery
Community College District
2%
St udent Paper
5
Submitted to St. Joseph High School
St udent Paper 2%
6
Submitted to Trident Technical College
St udent Paper 1%
/100 Instructor
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Text Comment. It has? We talked about giving evidence of this or a quick example to quiet
those who might disagree.
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QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").
Text Comment. Great quote, but it doesn't actually show the idea that play helps social
and emotional learning, like the previous sentence suggests.
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Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
QM No ","
Unnecessary comma:
Commas have a wide variety of uses: setting of f introductory phrases, separating items in lists,
separating adjectives, enclosing appositives, and preceding coordinating conjunctions that are
used to join two complete thoughts. However, commas should not be used alone to join two
complete thoughts or to unnecessarily break apart long sentences. Caref ul comma usage is
necessary to avoid conf using your readers.
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QM No ","
Unnecessary comma:
Commas have a wide variety of uses: setting of f introductory phrases, separating items in lists,
separating adjectives, enclosing appositives, and preceding coordinating conjunctions that are
used to join two complete thoughts. However, commas should not be used alone to join two
complete thoughts or to unnecessarily break apart long sentences. Caref ul comma usage is
necessary to avoid conf using your readers.
QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."
Text Comment. Overall, this paragraph certainly supports the idea that Brown is right, but
it doesn't obviously support your thesis f ocus on experience. What was Curwood's experience
with kindergarten? Since your thesis f ocuses on experience, your paragraphs would be more
cohesive and expected if you were to mention experience, too. T hat doesn't mean you have to
get rid of Curwood's strong stats; it just means that you could place those stats in the context
of Curwood's experience trying to decide what was best f or her son.
Comment 1
Keep this paragraph f ocused on Curwood's ideas. Save this f or a dif f erent paragraph or delete
it. Doing so will keep your paragraph more f ocused f rom beginning to end.
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Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
Text Comment. At least in the school where Brown was researching. T hat's probably no
the norm.
QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."
QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
Comment 2
T his point seems awkward and unexpected until a reader gets to the end of the paragraph.
How could you smooth that over?
I'd suggest making this two paragraphs. T he f irst would be short and would simply explain how
dif f erent your recess time was f rom Brown's essay. T he second would have a topic sentence
that states you see evidence that Brown is right about the type of learning that can happen
during play. T hen, you would analyze what you learned playing sports with your f riends, like you
already do.
T hese changes are minor, but they would help you create a more systematic and logical
progression f or your argument.
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Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
Text Comment. Good analysis of what you learned during play time!
QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."
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QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
QM Although/However
"Although" and "however" have become commonly conf used words. Remember that "although"
cannot be used as alone as an introductory phrase; "however" can. "Although" has to start an
introductory clause. For example:
"I'm glad you are both want to end cyber-bullying. However, we are straying f rom the topic."
I'm glad you both want to end cyber-bullying. Although many people are concerned about
this problem, it remains a serious threat on social media."
Strikethrough.
Text Comment. And what is this research? A quick ref erence would be suf f icient. Or you
could take this sentence out. You don't need it to make your point.
QM Possessive
T his word is possessive and needs an apostrophe.
Strikethrough.
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Text Comment. Conclusion? Your naysayer isn't you conclusion, and a strong conclusion
leaves the reader with a strong sense of your argument and the usef ulness of that argument.
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Italicize
Text Comment. Don't f orget dates of access f or online sources!
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