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14 April 2018
My intended audience is focused to those studying or practicing medicine for treatment of mental
illness. The goal is to offer information and an overview of differences among treatments in
Preface
What needs work in in the paper is the information I include under the sub questions. I would
like to remain aware of my intended audience with comments of where I stray from influential
material. I would like aid with the order I present material, to create a linear flow of context
throughout the paper leading to conclusion. Lastly, suggestions for organization or reordering of
context may offer additional help to the direction flow of material. The strength of my teacher
comment draft is the outline with the use of focused sub questions to address major points
encompassing the LOI. Throughout researching the topic and reflecting the focus of the paper, I
have generated what I believe to be a decent skeleton for the paper.
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Psychology is a recently developed field of scientific study, which focuses on the analysis
of the human mind. It encompasses not only the physical attributes of the brain but the responses
function has existed through most of human history until presently. The expansion of knowledge Commented [JC1]: Can you give us a brief overview? I’m
wondering whether your audience will have general
knowledge of these “disputes.”
in the field of psychology is led by recognition of mental disabilities. Psychologists and
researchers have developed a universally accepted literature, the DSM-5, to standardize the Commented [nt2]: Paraphrase of purpose statement
http://drwilliamdoverspike.com/files/apa_style_-
analysis of symptoms, to properly diagnose psychological disorders.
_citing_DSM-5.pdf
The manifestation of psychological disorders can be linked to the various factors such as:
traumatic experiences; childhood development; societal pressures and stress over-exertion (Sue). Commented [nt3]: Summarization of certain paragraphs
from pages 35-37
Mental disorders are considered illnesses; the severity of these illnesses can be often more
https://college.cengage.com/psychology/sue/abnormal/8e/
instructors/sue_irm.pdf
destructive to one’s health than physical ailments. The increasing prevalence of psychological
disorders is occurring on an international scale and appear to have dynamically variable effects
on different clients. Thus, emphasizing the importance of development towards effective and Commented [JC4]: Could you include some statistics here
to establish this phenomenon?
modernistic approaches to treatment for mental illness.
Skepticism that the integration of multiple treatment methods may offer a balanced and a
fundamentally more universal approach for treatment. The idea of treatment integration has been Commented [JC5]: Read this sentence and the next one
aloud. I’m having trouble making sense of what you’re
saying here.
particularly difficult through prior case studies; however, I along with others believe the attempt
to do so should not be abandoned (Laska). Hypothetically, psychologists could use the proposed Commented [nt6]: Summarization
offer optimized treatment for individual patients considering the factors which led to their mental
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illness. This would be best introduced into the field through a phycology journal, explaining
In this paper, I would like to examine treatment for psychological disability practices
internationally. To approach this, in a line of inquiry I ask, “How does the methodology for Commented [JC7]: Can you try introducing the LOI in a
less direct way?
treatment of mental illness differ between Eastern and Western cultures?”. In attempt to
concisely address the broad nature of this inquiry topic, I divide the paper into subtopic questions Commented [JC8]: Try using “I” and “we” here like it’s a
conversation. Reread “Theories of Intelligence” in CR as an
example.
which are: 1) “What are the medicinal approaches for mental health?”; 2) “What are the
therapeutic approaches for mental health?” and 3) ”What are advantages and disadvantages for
mental health?”.
What are the medicinal approaches for mental health? Commented [JC9]: This is an effective way to break the
topic down into parts.
Western culture practices the placement of clients into classification systems; placement
is determined by the degree of symptoms expressed in clients. Once placed into a classification,
clients are typically prescribed similar medications. Medications are synthetic compounds, which
have passed clinical trials to promote the mental health of a client by diminishing undesirable
found in nature. Current Eastern medical models of that nature have a homeopathic effect. For
“Homeopathy enjoys growing popularity with the lay population, but it is not acknowledged by
academia or included in medical guidelines” (Bellavite). Commented [JC10]: This quote effectively supports your
statement here. You’ll want to include some of your own
commentary to further integrate it into your inquiry.
What are the therapeutic approaches for mental health? Commented [nt11]: Direct quote
https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s12682-014-0198-
Western theories of counseling and psychotherapy classifies an individual by the x
demonstration of traits shared throughout the population. Eastern practices stray away from the
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‘way’ of Buddhism, that is, a ‘non-dualistic wisdom’ or ‘non-self-referential awareness’ into the
http://psycnet.apa.org/record/2014-49367-002
What are advantages and disadvantages for mental health?
The advantage of Western Culture is the main ability to reach their populations
efficiently. With much technology development conduction through the recent years, dating to
the age of industrialism, we have been obsessed with rapid production. This allows for
compounds, it is hard to predict the outcome to exposure with any given human mind. As
depicted by the U.S. Department of Health and Human Services, prescribed medicine may be Commented [nt13]: Paraphrase
Paragraph 1-3
abused or lead to worsening of symptoms; currently we face the opioid epidemic across the US.
https://www.hhs.gov/opioids/about-the-epidemic/
The advantage of Eastern Culture is the inherit objective of self-reflection found in their Commented [JC14]: Citation ?
culture. Unlike Western culture, Eastern mainly focuses on examining an individual’s mind and
utilizing natural ways to uproot the client’s disturbances. Thus, minimizing opportunities of
substance abuse or substance reliance for welfare. Eastern methodology has been practiced for
centuries with similar tactics, with frequent success but on a small scale at a person to person
rate. The culture’s lack of adaption to technology and minimal collection of clinical statistics Commented [JC15]: You mean Eastern culture, correct?
Works Cited
American Psychiatric Association. (2013). Diagnostic and statistical manual of mental disorders
Bellavite, Paolo. "Homeopathy and integrative medicine: keeping an open mind." Journal of
Laska, Kevin M., Alan S. Gurman, and Bruce E. Wampold. "Expanding the lens of evidence-
(2014): 467.
Lin, Peter, and Henry M. Seiden. "Mindfulness and psychoanalytic psychotherapy: A clinical
US Department of Health and Human Services. “About the U.S. Opioid Epidemic.” HHS.gov. 6