Eric Castro

English 28

Professor Batty

23 Mayo 2018

Short Reflection: Argumentative Essay Revision

My argumentative essay needed some revision and I re-examined my work based in the

teacher’s remarks as well my classmate’s comments about my argumentative essay. First, I took

care of the title capitalizing every first letter, and also I extent it to make it more creative. I hope

I achieved it. Second, I fixed the citation regarding Gloria Anzaldúa experience explaining a

little bit about the author. I removed a citation that I previously incorporated, basically because

the lack of time to dedicate more effort to this activity. I am referring to the Richard Rodriguez

citation about his struggle with self-identity. In other circumstances I would not remove this

citation because I really like to use others voices to express myself. Although, it hides my own

voice I always use this. However, this will make my own voice more clear. Taking about the lack

of use of my own voice, a comment made by you, I added many more sentences that help to fix

the problem. Thus, I found more practical to eliminate Rodriguez citation in this essay. In

addition, I separated a long paragraph in two and made sure that I used the “sandwich” style for

the two paragraphs created. Finally, I incorporated some clarification about the physical

punishment to children who were caught speaking Spanish at school as well to clarify the

difference between Chicano children and immigrant children.