ENTRY 1

Two paragraphs with topic sentence in two different locations

Paragraph 1

Topic Sentence: Secondly,parents should also educate their children on smart

consumerism.

Secondly, parents should also educate their children on smart

consumerism.This helps protect children from negative media influence,especially
television advertisements.Advertisements have in many ways ,promoted products
that seemingly assure healthy living.Inreality.most products tat are advertised try to
capture the market pie with their wide range of consumer products.Children need to
be taught how to optimize the value of the money they spend.Parents should involve
theier children when shopping as this can tremendously reinforce smart shopping
practices.

Paragraph 2

Topic sentence :Travel also teaches adaptability

Besides learning about the customs of other people and gaining a great deal of
knowledge, travel also teaches adaptability. Those who travel a great deal and are
willing to rough it out are not so fastidious about the ordinary comforts of life. They
make cheerful and pleasant companions. Travel also breaks through religious
fanaticism and encourages exchange of ideas.People who have succeeded in
developing an interest in birds and animalas,in rocks and minerals and in plants
trees find travel a rewarding experience.

Source: English composition. SS Mubaruk& Brothers pte.ltd

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ENTRY 2

Twp paragraph with different strategies of supporting details

Paragraph 1

Strategies of supporting details : Statistics

Figure 1 shows the rhinoceros populations in three reserves in the years 2000, 2005
and 2010, and table 1 shows the actions taken to protect the rhinoceros
populations. Generally, the rhino populations depended on the measures that were
taken to protect them.

In 2000, the rhino populations all three reserves were between 80 and 100. In
2005, Baobab Rhino Sanctuary took three actions to protect its rhinos, and the
population increased to 130, Conversely, the National Reserve did not take any
action in 2005 and the population dropped to 60 rhinos. Acacia Park took one
action, which was awareness campaigns, and the rhino population also
decreased to 60. In 2010, the Boabab Rhino Sanctuary undertook four actions
to protect the rhinos, and the population soared to 200, double the original
number. The National Reserve took two measures and the rhino population there
recovered slightly, climbing to 70. Acacia Park, meanwhile, continued its awareness
campaign but took no further measures, and its rhino population slipped to 45 rhinos.

Paragraph 2

Strategies of supporting details :Authority

Viruses are always there. As the environment is disturbed. People have become
closer to them and they become disease,She said that there should be increased
awareness by governments and the medical community that these disease are not
medical problems to begin with. In her view, As stated by Andrew Cunningham
(2011)from Institute of Zoology mentioned in the British Medical Journal that
as the human population continues to grow, human needs for space and
resource result in further encroachment into a diminishing natural world. In
his opinion the problem is not small and tackling it will not be easy, but recognizing a
common problem is as start

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ENTRY 3

Two paragraph with different strategies of introduction

Paragraph 1

Strategy/Approach: Definiton/Explanation

What is bullying?Bullying is persistent unwelcome behavior,mostly using

unwarranted or invalid criticism, nit-picking,fault-finding
alsexclusion,isolation,being single out and treated differently being houted at,
humiliated and much more.The purpose of bullying is to hide
inadequacy.Therefore,anyone who choose to bully is admitting his inadequacy and
the extent to which a person bullies is a measure of his inadequacy, and the extent
to which a person bullies is a measure of his inadequacy.There are several types of
bullying in the work place. Pressure bullying or unwitting bullying is where the stress
of the moment causes behavior to deteriorate; the person becomes short-
tempered,irritable and may shout or swear at others. Everybody does this from time
to time, but when the pressure is removed, behavior returns to normal Corporate
bullying is where the employer abuses employees with impunity knowing that the law
is weak and jobs are scarce.Employees may be threatened that if they do not work
the extra hours,they could lose their jobs.

Paragraph 2

Strategy/Approach:General to specific

The number of snatch thefts in the country is increasing and many innocent
people have lost cash,valuable and some even their lives.Victims are often
emotionally traumatized event months after the incidents.As innocent people,
we must not sit back and wait for these unscrupulous thieves to rob and injure us. It
is important that as concerned proactive individuals, we take the necessary steps to
avoid becoming victims ourselves by always being aware of our surrounding,always
walking in the groups,avoiding all lonely roads and darkalleys and not wearing
expensive or flashy jewellery when we are out alone.

Source: Muet paper 4.Penerbitilmupublisihing 2016

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ENTRY 4

(i) Two paragraph with different strategies of conclusion

Paragraph 1

Strategy/Approach: Suggestion

In conclusion, sport brings a lot of benefits to students. It promotes unity, reduces

social problems and helps maintain good health. Taking part in sport either as
player or a spectator is never a waste of time and therefore it should be
emphasized in school.

Paragraph 2

Strategy approach: Quotation

In conclusion, appearance can be deceiving.People may present themselves on one

way but they are really another.We need to make an effort to get to know them on a
deeper level in order to really know their true character. We should always look
beyond the outward appearances. As saying goes“ judgmental prevents us from
seeing the good that lies beyond appearance”.

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 (II) One(1) paragraph with a number of cohesive devices

Cohesive devices: Such as, To begin with, Apart from that,

Also,Morever,Another,In short

With the advent of science and technology, people’s lifestyle have changed over the
decades. More chronic health problem such as obesity, hypertension, heart disease
and lung cancer are on the rise, not only in Malaysia but also in other parts of the
world. What are the factors that have brought about this situation?

To begin with, unhealthy lifestyles such as lack of exercise and consuming foods
rich in calories and sugar results in obesity. Apart from that, smoking has
contributed significantly to the high number of lung cancers, as stated in reports, that
in every six seconds one person dies due to tobacco. Also, smoking affects the level
of productivity at the work place. Moreover, second-hand smoke that is inhaled by
non-smokers is even more detrimental to health as it cancer causing.

Another cause is the introduction of modern gadgets like computers with internet
connection, mobile phones, and televisions. The use of these gadgets minimizes
youngester’s movement and they gradually become couch-potatoes instead of
playing games outdoors.

In short, the issue of chronic health problems should be addressed urgently by the
relevant parties so that we have a healthier younger generation in the future.

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ENTRY 5

Acknowledge the sources of portfolio entry 1 to 4 using the APA format

Gordon,W,J. (2000).

ENTRY 6

Find an expository essay of the EXAMPLICATION or COMPARISON & CONTRAST

patterns of organization (5 paragraph) and analyse and identify the six(6) following
aspects:

Type of essay: Exemplification Essay

Tourism is fast becoming a booming industry, especially in third world countries.

These countries offer a more natural and scenic environment that developed
countries cannot really present because of industrialization. Malaysia has benefited
much from tourism whereby many employment opportunities have been created as it

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is a boon to the economy of the country.Tourism is more than just travelling as it
can bring economic and social benefit whereby it promotes racial unity and
harmony, creates higher level of health awareness and generates greater
income to those participating in the industry.

Firstly, tourism promotes racial unity and harmony. Being a multiracial country,
the different races and other minority ethnic groups have learnt to live together
despites the diverse differences in our ways of life. Our ability to work together has
not only strengthened our diversity but also helped us live in peace and harmony and
remained united as one nation. This special attachment has made tourism in
Malaysia a wonder to many foreigners, especially our diverse cultures and practice.
Local tourism has also encouraged Malaysians form all walks of life to travel
extensively and thus enrich our understanding of the local practices. For example,
visits to the various cultural heritage centres, Portuguese Settlement, fishing
village, orang asli settlements and the Iban’s longhouse have also helped
spread a better understanding and acceptance of the different lifestyle
practiced among Malaysians. Both local and foreign visitors get to learn exchange
ideas and understand the unique lifestyle of people of Borneo too. Hence, tourism
bridges the differences and promotes a more meaningful sense of unity among the
different races.

Secondly, tourism promotes a greater awareness of hygiene. It is an irrefutable

fact that a clean image not only adds to the attractiveness of tourist spot but also
influence tourist decision to return. For our country to receive an influx of tourists all
the year round remain competitive in this sector, a significant number of campaign
promoting cleaner eateries and public toilets have been carried out. The campaign
‘Malaysia Green and Clean’has to a certain extent increased awareness on the
importance of maintain the cleanliness of various tourist attractions among tour
agencies, Organisations, services providers, entrepreneurs and communities in
supply chains have collaborated and work towards providing a more pleasant
experience to visitors. Overall, the campaign has brought about a new level of
awareness of hygiene to all the stakeholders. In short, a greater level of hygiene has
not only changed people’s indifference attitude on the importance of a cleaner
surrounding but also enabled tourism in Malaysia to thrive and remain competitive
as the top travel destination among tourist

Thirdly, tourism brings in lucrative revenues to our nation. Tourism, our main
source of revenue, has for umpteen years created job opportunities, both through
direct employment within the tourism industry and indirectly in sectors such as retails
and transportation. To illustrate, hotels and other service-oriented establishments
like restaurants are set up to meet the ever increasing demand for services by both
local and foreign tourists. When unemployment rate is low, income level will rise and
this will lead to higher purchasing power among consumers and finally higher tax-
returns for the government. When tourist spend their earnings on goods and
services, it brings about the “ multiplier effects” creating more jobs, providing

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opportunities for small-scale business enterprises in rural communities and
generating additional tax as well as service tax. Indeed, money spent by tourist
translates into profit and income for the employees, all stakeholders, the government
and industry players.