02/10/18 Teacher Feedback Name: Oscar

Current grade: C+ / B-
TASK DETAILS STRENGTHS IMPROVEMENTS
Summer As per Weebly page complete
Task 1 instructions. To include:
- Gallery Clear title
visits x 3 Full sentences explaining visit
and artwork using the
attached question sheet
Grade for Pictures to illustrate their
section: B+ work
Quotes relating to the work to
support reflections and
research

Summer As per Weebly page complete

Task 2 instructions. To include:
- 15-20 of Clear title
your own Full paragraph explaining
pictures (minimum 300 words) why
these images were chosen
Grade for and what they say about
section: C you.
No slideshow format
CONTEXTUAL Images of her work
ARTIST 1 -
LEE BUL Biographical and descriptive A demonstration of limited We discussed so much more in
paragraphs using question research with minimal class – use your notes to their full
sheets and review given in information advantage. Nothing goes to waste
lesson linking to the meaning – why does she use the materials
of her work she does?
A VERY good start, using all How is her work perceived?
Grade for Explanation paragraph key terms from our lesson What do reviews say about her?
section: introducing your photoshoot, and clearly linked to your What visual links can you make
using keywords and lesson outcomes but you still need between her background and her
Photos B- objectives to push it further – tell us work?
Writing C+ about potential meanings you
would be exploring as an
artists – what could these
sculptures suggest for you
independent of Bul?

35 photographs in “gallery”
format with 10 different set-
ups / focuses.
3 strongest images as
enlargements with 1
evaluative paragraph using
questions from Weebly.
Good range of ideas explored
in this with almost no
background “noise” and
unwanted objects. Therefore,
the images visually support
your task. Very well done.
Beautifully chosen images
that do not repeat one
another and show your ability
to vary your framing and
Introductions to each theme are
brief – expand by fully explaining
your insights, i.e what messages /
what is perfect contrast and why /
did you achieve your goal / what
else did you achieve or notice /
which images are strongest /
which resonate best with Bul’s
work?
Push your annotations further by
considering how the photo could
be improved and always refer
back to the lesson objective
 lighting. Particularly find the (composition) – this does not have
chain lit one of most to be as a negative but as posing
significance to Bul’s work and an alternative approach, i.e. As an
as an abstract piece of art. image it has made me consider
……….. as a reflection of Bul’s work
Formal All work presented to the
elements format detailed on my Weebly Missing:
(FE) Lesson page: FE explanation and description
1: Pattern 1. FE description Texture and pattern description
and Texture 2. Texture and Pattern Macro enlargements and evals
description Aperture enlargements and evals
3. Macro description,
Grade for photos gallery + 3 Basic gallery with some strong This misses out a chance on
section - enlargements and images (lights in the ceiling, suggesting the pros and cons of
evaluation curtains, pen on floor) but both teniques and clearly
Writing: E 4. Aperture description, task is incomplete. Your explaining your technical
Photos C+ photos gallery + 3 photos show strength in developments against Bul’s work.
enlargements and composition and line (keeping It all shows how your
evaluation verticals and horizontals level considerations of her work are
5. Clear links to Lee Bul’s to create balance) impacting yours as your skills grow
work in writing using
all keywords Question – how can you Insufficient:
ensure enough light in your Macro definition
camera? Aperture definition – this contains
depth of field, foal points,
forgournds, backgrounds, camera
angles, etc ……

FE lesson 2: 1. Explanation of form Great explanation of studio Missing description of form and
Form and and tone as FEs lighting and it’s merits – tone as formal elements
tone 2. Studio lighting refined presentation too.
explanation, and Studio lighting annotations letting
examples, using Studio lighting photos are you down – there is so much to
Grade for previous students inconsistent and therefore discuss – strategy, reasons for this
section: work as baseline some need reshooting – technique to be used, light
3. Myra Greene always achieve focus, perfect manipulations, dramatic moves,
Writing: D photoshoot from composition and truly artistic intentions, etc……
Studio: C- lesson achieved lighting goals –
Greene: B 4. Myra Greene butterfly and backlighting Discuss the merits of composition
photoshoot from have issues. and framing in this task.
home
Greene photos in lesson – Start discussing moods and
very technically skilled and atmospheric qualities in all your
show learning from lesson annotations – what is causing this?
regarding lighting. Very What message could your own
intrigued by the edge lighting. work deliver independent from
Are all in focus though? the artist you are looking into?

Greene photos at home – Be cautious of taking repeated

great artistic decision to
dramatically alter lighting
considerations. Very harsh
and intrusive
images to fill space – are you
adjusting anything in between
shots? Can you attempt to
photograph other parts of the
body to push this idea forward?
Research the “rule of thirds” for
next lesson’s editing task to move
forward and aim for B grades.