Mendoza 1

Raul Mendoza

Professor Maple

11/29/18

English 101-08

Critical Reflection

Over the time of working on the portfolio website and the revised paper, I had met the

important SLOs that had to meet. The SLOs were met either on the website while making it or

in while typing or revising a paper.

The revised paper went through many changes, but some paragraphs did not change

much at all. The introduction to the paper is one of those paragraphs that did not change much

yet it does have some noticeable changes. The one major change to the entire paragraph is

making the thesis and the standpoint of the paper clearer so you could see what side would be

argued. The sentence was changed from just transitioning to the next paragraph to “Nike out of

both companies appeals to the viewer by showing you that anything is possible as long as you

work harder towards it like others you might look up to.” The reasoning for this change is so the

argument was made much clearer since after submitting it, it was noticeable that my stance was

not made clear and that you would have to put the bits and pieces together to get an

understanding about what side I was on.

One of the paragraphs that took the most change was the second paragraph on the first

page. The first couple sentences were just some word changes and changing a sentence to make

it flow better and to feel less cluttered. The one part that was changed was when it came down to
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giving a small explanation about both paragraphs and what they were about. Such as when

explaining the Tesla commercial I decided to go more in depth but not as much to give up the

entire advertisement. The same change was made for the Nike commercial but the part that was

changed was talking about how Shaquem Griffin and Serena Williams were introduced. I only

explained what was said when introducing Serena Williams and took out the part when about

Shaquem Griffin and moved it to the sixth paragraph on the fourth page.

Two new paragraphs were added to the revised paper. These two paragraphs are the third

paragraph located on the second page and the sixth paragraph located on the fourth page. The

reasoning for the addition of the two paragraphs was to get rid of two previous paragraphs that

were not much needed and move the information that the two-previous had onto a singular new

one. Which those two paragraph that were gotten rid of were made into the sixth paragraph on

the fourth page. It was made into the sixth one which argues out the which of the two

advertisements works more effectively and which uses the rhetorical triangle properly. Since the

Nike ad is the one that is being argued for it was the one that had the most examples and one of

those examples is the one that about Shaquem Griffin and how he was introduced similarly to

Serena Williams but clearly, they are much different from each other. The third paragraph on the

second page that was added to talk about what went on in the Nike advertisement and how it was

organized. It was added to explain more about the advertisement and to give the reader that

probably has not seen it a clear image of what was going on in the advertisement. Another reason

for adding it was because previously there was an entire explanation to the Tesla ad with

minimal explanation of the ad that was mainly being argued.

The Tesla ad was talked about a lot in the first version of the paper. The revised version

still has that paragraph, but it was moved to another spot now it is the fourth paragraph on the
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fourth page. It was moved to so that both ads would be talked about closer to the beginning of

the paper and then argue for one more than the other when previously it was the exact opposite

order. It did not change much it still has much of what was originally there, but one part was

added. The part where I stated “At first glance, you might not even notice it’s importance, but the

daughter is going to answer him using sign language. Before she can do so she presses down on

the windshield wiper stock twice to engage something Tesla was introducing in this new car

which is called Tesla Autopilot.” The reasoning for this addition was because when the original

paper was written that was not something that was noticed but when going back to look at it was

something that could slip by anyone. It was also important to add this piece of information

because throughout the ad not much is given about the car other than the look, but it shows it this

piece of information so subtly. Other than just some small details here in there in that paragraph

not much else was changed.

A bit about the website and its layout to why it flows as so. The website starts off with a

brief explanation of the website followed by the original version of the Rhetorical Analysis

paper. The reasoning behind being set up as such as so is so you could see the change over the

time while also learning what skills were learned in the process. That is a major reason why the

second tab on the website is the SLOs only to be followed by the Revised paper and the Critical

reflection.

The SLOs that needed to be met were met and are shown on the website with evidence.

The Revised paper is also shown to see those skills in play and to see what has changed from the

original.