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Studio 6 - Revision
Studio 6 – Revision
This chapter on revision was, for the most part, helpful, entertaining, and a semi-new perspective
form me.
Most all the activities seemed reasonable, and I will definitely do at least one. Something I was
worrying about in regards to my draft was that it was too reliant on other sources. No one that
read it, including Professor Campbell, said that it was, however I am still not sure. The
“Wrestling with the Draft” activity where you highlight pieces of evidence and pieces of your
own writing not only included an interesting metaphor but a great way to prove or disprove my
worry. I will definitely be doing this. The only thing that could make it easier for me is if I knew
clearly what constituted as ‘my thought’ – is clarification part of ‘my thought,’ for example? It
seems that it is according to the chapter, but that claim doesn’t feel right to me. Additionally,
directing the reader’s response is something that I feel I must do by Tuesday the 20th so I can get
a good idea as to what major revisions I should do. But in addition to the questions posed in the
chapter, I feel I should also ask what research they think is missing. I didn’t use one of the
sources in my annotated bibliography, so is that missing or actually unnecessary? I think the
latter; however, a reader might think differently. Finally, whether or not I do the “Cut and Paste
Revision” is dependent on how much the margin outline helps me. This is because the margin
outline sort of has the same purpose, except no cutting is involved. If I feel the need to literally,
physically move and cut my paper around after the margin outline, if I am still unsure as how to
revise after doing all the other activities, I will do it. If not, I will save time and start revising.
Still, all of these tasks could definitely come in handy for any future paper revisions I do.
Other information and tips presented in the chapter were not as helpful as the activities overall.
The “Facts on the Web” table at the end of the chapter was the part that seemed the least helpful.
Most all of the sources listed don’t really pertain to my EIP. Maybe I could use American
Factfinder and other sources under “General,” however I think I have a reliable place to go for
statistics on my topic without having to use another source. It’s a good thing to come back to in
the future, but seems irrelevant to me right now. Furthermore, I already knew some of the points
made throughout the chapter, like how revision is more than just fixing minor errors and the
three main things that you should make sure a paper does. Some of his wording was interesting,
like reader-prose vs writer-prose, and it is good to have a checklist with explanation, but these
parts were more of a reminder than new information to me.
Even with these known points, he still had his moments. His real-life examples were the most
entertaining, persuasive part of the chapter. The connection he made to his high school girlfriend
and revision in the beginning pulled me in and made me feel supported – I feel the same way
about my drafts. Moreover, when he gave examples of how his students found the activities
helpful, changed their drafts, and illustrated his points, I better understood what he was saying
and how it could pertain to my draft. Using stories and examples in general seem like a good
Kira Marsh
Studio 6 - Revision
way to engage the reader and get them to understand your topic, and I feel I should do more of
that in my EIP.
This chapter kind of scared me at the prospect of revising, especially with all the other things I
have to do. Like he said in the beginning of the chapter However, by using the exercises outlined
as well as the margin outline and Thanksgiving break, I think I can make it manageable. I never
knew that there were so many useful activities to help with revision!
Margin Outline