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Some of my
hobbies are playing basketball and reading books. My favourite subject is biology.
Throughout my time at origins, I have grown a lot in many diferrent ways. But mainly I
year, I was quite shy student and used to hesitate from greeting and communicating
with new people. I was also new to the United states at that time, so It was challenging
for me to adapt to this environmemt. However, since origin high school is so diverse and
when I started talking to new people, I found pleasure in it. People would tell me about
their culture, food and their traditional ways, which I really enjoy it. So now when I have
to talk to new people, I talk to them in a very openly manner and engage myself with
them. Some of the people that played significant role in my growth are my teachers and
my friends. These people have been always by my side when I need them the most. I
remember when I recently came to America, I was nervous and having little trouble in
language. However, my teachers and friends would help me and support me, which
to become a doctor. I haven’t yet decided what kind of doctor I want to be, but most
likely I would prefer pediatrician because I like spending time with kids. Today I will talk
about my process of growth at origins. One of the KCS strategy that I choose to reflect
ideas in multiple formats. I chose this one because as I mentioned before that during my
freshmen year, I wasn’t that good at talking with new people. Just like I had
freshman year, I was struggling most in communications because at that time I didn’t
had that formal tone and effective style of writing. Therefore I had to spend many hours
just to complete a single assignment. I have struggled a lot in sharing my view point and
thought process with others. One thing which I’m pretty certain about is that
communication skill will play a major role in my career. It’s because as a doctor, you
suppose to explain people the causes and effects of particular illness or medicine. So if
you are good at communication, it will help patient to understand why he/she should
Amina Suzuki
Mr Farrell
7 Feb,2017
ELA 9
The importance of persuasions are major and significant role in real life or in
America.Persuasion probably impact to an audience or any other . For example someone has a
speech for any kind of purpose,He/She must use logos,ethos and pathos.without these things you
cannot support your claim.so these things are essential for everyone. Ethos is an appeal to
ethics,and is way of convincing someone of the character or credibility of the persuader. Pathos
some reasonable doubts and facts. The story of name is “Twelve Angry Men”.There is a young
Hispanic man who was charged with killing his father and twelve jurors who are going to decide
whether boy is guilty or not.There is a lot of deliberations,arguments and stubbornness. To what
extent does persuasion depend on reasoning (or logos)? Persuasion depends on logos to an equal
extent as pathos.
But then just maybe he did.Maybe the old man doesn’t like the kid that’s why”.
Claim: In this statement his pathos are saying maybe he did not lie but maybe he did.He is not
denying or refusing the facts but he is trying to say that there is possibility.There is not
reasonable doubts.
Textual evidence#2:”For the kid to be guilty he must be stupid, than smart, then stupid and then
smart and so on, and, also, for the kid to be guilty the old man downstairs must be a liar half of
the time and the other half of the time he must tell the truth.you can reasonable doubt”.
Claim: This statement demonstrates that there is both facts and pathos.Probably the old man is
not completely
lying but also not completely saying the truth.There is a possibility that someone else did,like
Textual Evidence#3:”It’s just that i looked at him for a very long time.The seam of his
jacket was split under his arm.Did you notice that?He was a very old man with a torn jacket,and
he carries two canes.I think i know him better than anyone here.This is a
quite,frightened,insignificant man who has been nothing all his life-who has never had
recognition-his name in the newspapers.Nobody knows him after seventy -five years. This is a
very sad thing.A man like this needs to be recognized-to be questioned,and listened to,and
Claim: In this quote there are both of facts and logos.The juror nine knows the old man very well
that he is old enough and also weak.So this is the fact.And pathos(feelings)is that the old man is
unpopular and he wants to may be become famous or the old man just believing in his ownself
Rebuttal:I disagree.I will rather say that both are main.For instance “i just think he is guilty. I
thought it was obvious.I mean that nobody proved otherwise”. In this statement it’s only describe
the facts which is obvious.It’s not clear probably somebody else deliberately did this murder who
disliked or execrated the murder. It’s uncertain he just saw the majority of vote or facts and
say”yes he is guilty”.
Conclusion:
So,in the situation especially the discussion is about someone’s life then we should
considerably think about the things.Not just only depend on facts but rather pathos and ethos
too.It’s because sometimes everything is not as it seems and perhaps there is propaganda by
someone.These are some of my reasons for supporting my claim that persuasion depends on
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For this assignmet, I was required to read a “Twelve angry men” book, which was about young
Hispanic man who was charged with killing his father and there are twelve jurors who are going
to decide whether boy is guilty or not. So based on that book I was required to make my own
claim and then I had to wrie a essay based on my own created claim. My claim was “persuasion
depend on logos to an equal extent as pathos”. There are several things that I could have
improved in this essay. For instance I should have provided my esssay with more sufficient and
relevant evidences. It’s because if you are arguing about something, you need to make a logic in
your argument and have to have multiple evidence to prove that why your point is valid and
correct. It’s because if you are arguing without making logic then your whole argument is
pointless. So communication plays a significant role in academics life and in our personal life,
because no matter what field or what career you are going to you are going to face
communication. For instance, in order to get the job you have to give a interview and have to
collaborae with new people. So if you are good at communication, it can make things less
stressful.
Another example:
Many women in the the world are affected by Pelvic Inflammatory disease. It is a serious
infection but many aren’t aware of this disease. People think it’s just a simple infection, but as a matter
of fact it’s a infectious disease. It’s a common disease and women worldwide problem. According to
the National STD curriculum www.std.uw.edu , this illness is pretty much common. There isn't a very
accurate percentage but estimation shows that 4.4% are affected among sexually experienced women.
I selected this topic because my cousin(doctor) and I were discussing the most common disease in our
society currently. She told me that majority of cases that she has been diagnosing in her patients is PID.
Then it just caught my interest and developed my curiosity for this topic.
Pelvic inflammatory disease is a bacterial infection of the female reproductive organs. PID
usually occurs as the result of spread of a sexually transmitted disease STD, but this is not the only
reason for this illness. PID can also caused by other types of bacteria which normally found in the
vagina and that could be responsible for this disease. Bacteria which already found in vagina can
spread to the fallopian tube or in uterus and eventually cause infection www.medlineplus.gov There
are several reproductive structure that can be affected by this illness which includes ovaries, uterus,
cervix and fallopian tube. When bacteria enter these areas, it cause infection and damage these specific
female’s reproductive organs. For instance it can cause swelling or produce pus in fallopian tubes. It
may also create scar tissues at damage areas, because scar tissue repairs the damage in the skin. But
what are the functions of theses organ? So Fallopian tube are the tubes that carry the eggs from the
ovary to the uterus and eventually fertilization occurs in tube as well. Ovary is the structure where
women produce its eggs and it also produce hormones which are progesterone and estrogen. And
uterus is where embryo develops into a fetus, in other words where baby grows. The reproductive
structure can definitely have negative impact by the illness. When scar tissue being formed in the
Fallopian tube, it prevents sperm and egg to meet. Therefore egg would not be able to travel to its
correct place, at uterus and started growing in the Fallopian tube. This is known as Ectopic pregnancy,
and it's dangerous because Fallopian tube does not expand the way uterus does and tubes can be burst
suddenly.
According to National STD curriculum www.std.uw.edu , the non-Hispanic black race has one
of the highest percentage for PID. This data shows that non-Hispanic black has affected by almost 15%
while non-Hispanic White has less than 10% of people are affected.
www.std.uw.edu
There are few risk factors which include, having multiple sex partners, the more partners you have the
greater your risk is. Sex at younger can also be risk factor. There are several symptoms of PID for your
awareness which include a pain during sex, or by having irregular periods or painful periods. One of
the common symptom is pain in lower abdomen www.mayoclinic.org. All of these mentioned above
symptoms are noticeable and can help you to concern your doctor.
Interestingly this illness can be preventable. You can avoid having multiple sex partners, or
avoid too much sex attempts. In this way you may have less chance of STD(sexually transmitted
disease). Some of current cures available for PID is by taking antibiotics regularly, but if illness get
worse then it may require surgery www.acog.org . Some of new thing that I learned is that PID is
pretty common and serious health problem in US, which can lead to Ectopic pregnancy. Some of the
questions that I want to go more in depth include: Is PID only common in US ? Is PID worldwide health
issue? And Is PID only occurs at young age? The information I collected from this topic is really helpful
and can be useful near future. Since I researched on this topic briefly, I can aware someone who might
suffering through this illness. For example by informing them some of treatments, that are available
“Mayo Clinic.” Mayo Clinic, Mayo Foundation for Medical Education and Research,
www.mayoclinic.org/.
“MedlinePlus - Health Information from the National Library of Medicine.” MedlinePlus Trusted
“Womens Health Care Physicians.” The American College of Obstetricians and Gynecologists -
ACOG, www.acog.org/.
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This shows my growth because in this assignment, I have explained the causes and effects of
diesease by collecting valid and reliable evidence in order to support my explanation. Moreover,
in this assignment, I didn’t only use textual expanation but I have also included bar graph, in
order to expain diesease in more than one format. And last but not least I have also expalined
why I chose this topic as my main focus, what are some reasons that caught my attention for this
specific diesease. These example shows my growth because I was able to interpret things and