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NAME: _________________________ BLOCK: _______ DATE: _________________

SHI HUANG DI ESSAY ASSIGNMENT PACKET


DUE: Monday, Nov. 8, before 3 p.m.

The purpose of this assignment is to evaluate the reign of Shi Huang Di of the Qin dynasty.

The final product for this assignment is a three-paragraph, thesis-driven analytical essay that
answers the thesis question using specific evidence.

Thesis question: Shi Huang Di’s policies are considered by many historians to be ruthless. Did
the results justify his actions?

Your source packet can be found on the class blog: http://mskuoworldhistory.blogspot.com.

You will need to turn in:


□ the essay
□ Works Cited page
□ the rough draft
□ completed outline from this packet
□ the rubric that is in this packet

The essay itself should contain:


□ A thesis statement and focus statement in the introductory paragraph, which will also
have background information to give historical context
□ TWO body paragraphs that include the following in EACH:
o An idea-driven topic sentence
o 2-3 pieces of specific evidence that prove one PERSIA GEM
o Brief background context that introduces each piece of evidence
o Analysis on each piece of evidence
o A link that wraps up and transitions to the next paragraph
□ A maximum of two direct quotations. Choose your marshmallows carefully. 
□ parenthetical citation

The essay you turn in should:


□ Be final-draft quality
□ Be typed
□ Be formatted in 12-point Times New Roman, doubled-spaced
□ Be printed out before you get to class. I do not have a printer and do not accept e-mailed
assignments.
□ Have your name on it

The essay will be graded using the rubric included in this packet

This essay is worth a test grade of 80 points. One-third of a letter grade (ex., B to B-) will be
deducted for each day the essay is late.
SHI HUANG DI ESSAY CALENDAR

BLOCK 1 BLOCK 2 BLOCK 3 BLOCK 4


In class:
Week of 10/25
* Han dynasty
* Introduce Shi Huang Di
essay

Homework:

* Read and annotate first and


second sources in essay packet
* Put evidence in your
evidence organizer (in packet)
* fill out bibliographic info

In class: In class: In class: In class:


Week of 11/1
* China quiz * NoodleBib tutorial with * Writing a thesis statement * Start rough draft in class!
* paraphrasing, quotations, librarians IN LIBRARY!
embedded citations  remember your essay
packets!

Homework: Homework: Homework: Homework:

* Read and annotate third and *work on MLA citations * Use thesis statement * finish rough draft
fourth sources in essay packet using NoodleBib. Questions? organizer to write a rough * self-edit for quality and
* Put evidence in evidence Ask the librarians! thesis statement components
organizer * Color-code your evidence * Use essay outline to * finalize final draft
* fill out bibliographic info according to PERSIA GEM organize your essay PRINT! Before class!
Remember that the school
library has a printer, too!
BLOCK 1 BLOCK 2 BLOCK 3 BLOCK 4
In class:
Week of 11/8
* essays due!
* Han dynasty

Homework:

Silk Road pre-activity


EVIDENCE ORGANIZER

YES, the results did justify Shi Huang Di’s NO, the results did not justify Shi Huang Di’s
actions actions

COLOR CODE YOUR EVIDENCE:


_green __ politics ________ intellectual ________ military
________ economics ________ artistic
________ religion ________ geography
________ social ________ engineering/technology
NAME: ______________________________ COLOR: _____________ DATE: _________________________

SHI HUANG DI ESSAY THESIS ORGANIZER

Thesis question: Shi Huang Di’s policies are considered by many historians to be ruthless. Did the results justify his actions?

STEP THREE STEP ONE STEP TWO


3 to 4 possible criticisms (“although”) one central argument/idea 4-5 possible BIG IDEAS/concept umbrellas

Now, formulate your thesis: _________________________________________________________________________________________________


_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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SHI HUANG DI ESSAY ORGANIZER

I. Background info/historical context


Thesis statement
a. Counterargument: __________________________________________________
b. Answer the question: ________________________________________________
c. Big idea/concept umbrella: ___________________________________________
 put it together here: _______________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
_________________________________________________________________
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Focus statement: Which PERSIA GEMs are you using to prove your point?

__________________________________________________________________
II. Which PERSIA GEM are you using to organize the first paragraph? ______________
Topic sentence: _______________________________________________________
Evidence 1: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 1: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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Evidence 2: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 2: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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Evidence 3: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 3: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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link (wrap up and transition): _____________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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III. Which PERSIA GEM are you using to organize the second paragraph? ___________
Topic sentence: _______________________________________________________
Evidence 1: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 1: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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Evidence 2: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 2: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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Evidence 3: ___________________________________________________________
Analysis 3: ___________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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link (wrap up and transition): _____________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________
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No conclusion necessary
SHI HUANG DI ESSAY RUBRIC NAME: _____________________ LATE?: ________ SCORE: __________

CATEGORY Exemplary Proficient Developing Limited


Introduction/ * Expresses a specific, * Expresses a specific, * Expresses a vague, * Expresses an extremely
Thesis supportable central idea in a supportable central idea in somewhat supportable vague, trite and/or
sophisticated, concise manner a concise manner central idea insupportable central idea
* Establishes a clear, concise, * Establishes a clear * Attempts to preview the * Neglects to preview the
and compelling preview of the preview of the paper's paper's purpose paper's purpose
paper's purpose using PERSIA purpose using PERSIA GEM * Some background * Shi Huang Di's role in
GEM categories categories information on Shi Huang Di Chinese history is not clear
* Complexity of Shi Huang Di * Background information is mentioned
and Qin Dynasty's roles in on Shi Huang Di and Qin
Chinese history is clearly China is included
explained
Content * Employs two pieces of strong, * Employs two pieces of * Provides some weak * Provides little or no
well-chosen evidence per body evidence that are relevant evidence that may or may evidence relevant to the
paragraph that are relevant to to the central idea not be relevant to the central central idea
the central idea & explained in *Evidence is presented in idea *It is unclear which themes
detail two themes *The 2 body paragraphs are either paragraph belongs to
*Evidence is appropriately not dealing with separate
presented in 2 clearly distinct themes
themes
Analysis *Paragraphs begin with strong, *Paragraphs begin with *Not all paragraphs begin *Paragraphs lack a clear
idea-driven topic sentences clear topic sentences with topic sentences opening
*Develops and analyzes all *Develops and analyzes *Reiterates content with a *Does not attempt analysis
evidence with sophistication most of the evidence, limited amount of analysis
and originality, taking risks taking few risks with ideas
with ideas
Conventions/Pr * Uses appropriate grammar & * Uses appropriate * Makes grammatical & * Makes grammatical &
ocess spells correctly throughout grammar & spells correctly spelling errors that distract spelling errors that
*Cites varied sources, most of the time but do not compromise compromise meaning
paraphrases at least one in a *Cites at least two sources, meaning *Does not cite sources,
sophisticated way, and uses paraphrases from at least *Cites less than two sources, paraphrase or use a direct
two well-chosen, succinct one source, and uses at paraphrases from one or quote
direct quote least one direct quote uses one direct quote * Does not use citations
* Uses the correct citation * Uses the correct citation * Uses incorrect citation * Rough draft and/or
format consistently format most of the time format paragraph organizer not
* Well-edited rough draft and * Edited rough draft and * Minimally edited rough included
thoroughly completed paragraph organizer draft and somewhat
paragraph organizer included included complete paragraph
organizer included

Is the essay in 12-point (_____) Times New Roman (_____) and doubled spaced (_______)?
SHI HUANG DI ESSAY CHECK LIST

INTRODUCTION
 Background info that gives the essay historical context?
 Thesis statement that has three parts?
 Focus statement that gives the reader a preview of your essay?
o Does NOT say something like “My two PERSIA GEMs are …” or “The PERSIA
GEMs for this essay are …”

FIRST BODY PARAGRAPH


 Idea-driven (concept-driven) topic sentence?
 Topic sentence introduces the PERSIA GEM that you are using?
 Two well-chosen evidence?
 Two analysis that addresses the questions to consider? (see evidence v. analysis sheet)
 A link that wraps up your argument and transitions to the next?
 Correct parenthetical citation?
 A structure that looks like this:
P purpose
E1 first evidence
A1 first analysis
E2 second evidence
A2 second analysis
L link

SECOND BODY PARAGRAPH


 Idea-driven (concept-driven) topic sentence?
 Topic sentence introduces the PERSIA GEM that you are using?
 Two well-chosen evidence?
 Two analysis that addresses the questions to consider? (see evidence v. analysis sheet)
 A link that wraps up your argument and transitions to the next?
 Correct parenthetical citation?
 A structure that looks like this:
P purpose
E1 first evidence
A1 first analysis
E2 second evidence
A2 second analysis
L link

WORKS CITED
 Does the title say Works Cited?
 Is it on its own page, separate from the essay?
 Does it conform to MLA style? (ask the librarians!)

OTHER STUFF
 Only third person (they, them, she, he, etc.)?
 NO very, really, extremely, obviously, clearly, etc.?
 Check spelling and grammar?
 Read it aloud?