Ryan Almeda

Ms. Wilson
English II
2/1/19

Instructions:
1. Choose ​ONE​ of the stories you read for the Intro to English II assignment:
a. "A Dozen Keychains" by Firoozeh Dumas
b. "By Any Other Name" by Samantha Rama Rau

2. Write a well-constructed SPEPES paragraph in response to the prompt below. You must
CITE EVIDENCE​ from the text to support your response. Be sure to include the title(s)
and author(s) in your answer. You may use your annotations.

Prompt: ​The the people we are surrounded by and the things we go through in life ​change how
we see ourselves.​ In the text, how do social influences and experiences shape the protagonist's
attitude towards herself? (Type your response in the space below).

In A Dozen Key Chains, the speaker is shy and ignored by other campers
causing her to feel self-conscious and embarrassed. The speaker was so
self-conscious, in fact, that she decided not to bathe to avoid anyone making fun of her
naked body. In the text she says, “I really wanted to bathe but the thought of the mean
girls walking in on me while I took a shower was just too much.” The speaker believes
that if she bathes she could be humiliated by the other girls and would rather sacrifice
her hygiene than cope with that embarrassment. Earlier in the story the speaker reveals
that she is self-conscious when she says, “Nobody sat next to me. As the bus ride
began, I was acutely aware of how much fun the other kids seemed to be having.” The
speaker sat alone on the bus and her choice of words, “acutely aware,” imply that she is
feeling anxious or self-conscious about being without any friends. Overall, the speaker’s
timid personality and separation from other campers make her feel nervous and
embarrassed about herself.

Proficie Earned Points

Requirements Based on Standards nt? (X) Points Possible
Produce an answer based on the proof you
X
Statement - Student collect.
makes a clear,
Restate the question stem. Mention the name of
straightforward, X 3 3
the book, story, article.
relevant claim
(Standard W.9.1.a) Write a specific and detailed claim that reflects the
X
proof you have collected.
Use direct textual proof when possible (direct
Proof - Student X
quotes, or paraphrase from the text)
uses observable 3 3
evidence and X
Choose the proofs that actually prove your
 specific details to statement is true. The more specific, the better.
support opinion.
(Standards W.9.1.b, Cite proofs using appropriate formatting (includes X
W.9.1.d) punctuation)
Explain ​how​ your evidence proves your
Explanation - X
statement, not just ​that​ it proves your statement.
Student uses
critical thinking to Use key words from the statement to connect the 12
X
support evidence proof(s) to the statement. 12 (3 points
and connect it to Anticipate questions your reader might have and each)
the claim. X
answer them. Leave no doubt.
(Standard W.9.1.b)
Use sound reasoning in explanation X
Synthesis - Student Restate your main point(s) using different words
X
summarizes with the same meaning.
argument and, if
Remind your reader of your strongest proofs X 2 3
necessary, offers
extension. Why is your argument important to understanding
(Standard W.9.1.e) the text?
Utilize transition words/phrases to aid organization X

Transitions/Organiz Vary sentence structure (simple, compound,

ation/ complex)
Formatting/Style/To Use formal language to convey clear ideas (no 1.5 2
ne slang) Uses strong verbs and adjectives that make X
(Standards W.9.1.a, your argument clearer.
W.9.1.c, W.9.1.d)
Present an objective argument (keep your
X
emotions/ feelings out of it)
Conventions: Avoid run-ons, comma splices, and fragments
Grammar, Spelling,
Capitalization, and 1 2
Punctuation X
(Standard L.9.2) Avoid capitalization and spelling errors

Total: 22.5 25