assignment

by Haonan Zheng

Submission date: 14-Dec-2018 12:43PM (UT C+1000)

Submission ID: 1056790341
File name: 38599_73751910_1061956887_assignment.docx
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ORIGINALITY REPORT

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assignment
GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE

GENERAL COMMENTS

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Instructor
A good understanding of the f our issues has been
demonstrated, however needed more specif ic
inf ormation on the role of government to show a
thorough understanding of what is currently being
done.

/100
Cases are simple but reasonably well executed.
Could use f urther evidence of the benef it of the
strategies, or explored other complex issues to
demonstrate an expert understanding.

Ref erences are of a high quality. Evidence

supporting strategy recommendations could be
better explained and contained a minor error.

Overall a good well presented report. Needed more

editing to improve grammar throughout.

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Incorrect grammar

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Vague
Unclear:
When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes
is to
not of f er enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and
sketchy. A paper
is always strengthened when your claims are as specif ic as possible, T he more
detailed
evidence you of f er, the more ref erence points your reader will have. Remember
that you are
communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by.
Someone
who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you
have to
supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her.
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Grammar
Incorrect grammar

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Comment 1
T his was renounced last year.
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Comment 2
T his is a f airly dated ref erence.

Comment 3
T here are several specif ic initiatives that the government has introduced to help
with the gap,
such as spouse contribution rebate, contribution splitting, and catch-up
concessional
contributions.

Comment 4
T his sentence is contradictory. Need a clearer explanation.
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Comment 5
Needed to increase the f ocus on what the role of government and other stakeholders
is and
what they are doing about this.
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I f ind this explanation conf using. T here is no $2,820 in the example? And she
previously was
not contributing anything additional?
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Comment 7
Ah, ok. Now I get where that f igure came f rom. T he meaning of what was written
above does
not match what has occurred in the table.

Comment 8
It is a good idea to also show the projected balance at retirement based on this
strategy and
without. When advising you should do this as it communicates the long term benef it
to the
client.
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Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider
rewriting.

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Comment 9
Up to 10%. Need to be clear with what you are saying as you do not have them
withdrawing
10% in the table below.

Comment 10
I get a dif f erent tax f igure. Have you used the new tax rates? Have you included
the pension
rebate?
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Comment 11
T his should be relevant to your case studies, as in challenges to the recommended
strategies
or implementation. Such as overcoming inertia, or the government changing the
rules.
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Comment 12
Again, this should be relevant to your case studies. What other strategies could be
recommended?
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GRADING FORM: 7214AFE 2018 T RIMEST ER 3

HAONAN ZHENG

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CRITERION 1

Current issues (10%) Learning Outcome 1.1 Demonstrate knowledge

of current demographic issues impacting on Retirement planning
Good level of understanding of the four identified
issues and/or not all issues comprehensively
understood.

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CRITERION 2

Role of government (5%) Learning Outcome 1.1 Demonstrate

understanding of current legislation, role of government and/or other
stakeholder
Good explanation of the role of government and
legislation, and other stakeholders in response to
the issues.

CRITERION 3

Case studies (15%) Learning Outcomes 1.2, 1.3, 1.4 Apply advanced
theoretical and technical knowledge as it applies to superannuation,
retirement planning, taxation, and social security.
Appropriate case scenarios are developed that
focus on contemporary problems.
Recommendations are appropriate and demonstrate
a high ability to apply advanced technical knowledge
of retirement planning for different demographic
groups.

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CRITERION 4

Sources/evidence (15%) Learning Outcomes 1.1, 1.2, 1.3, 1.4

Good level of research using quality sources,
including academic references and correct citations.
Basic evidence for case study recommendations.

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CRITERION 5

Presentation (5%) Professional appearance (format, spelling,

grammar)
Report presents with mistakes and/or formatting
issues.