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Name: Nur Syuhadah Binti Noordin Group:

This is an individual activity for you to carry out. The activities should be completed and
submitted on EDMODO by the due date.

A. Revise the underlined sentences in the job application letter below by using “You”
view language.

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1. Since you are reading this, you will thankful if you give this opportunity to introduce

myself and see you worker how well their fit in Marketing and Sales Leadership

Training Internship.

2. Most recently, you will take a person who has experiences work at Morgan Stanley

where use to be primary liaison on a new Bond trading software program linking the

inventories of over 70 Brokers and Dealers.

3. Prior to that, you will see how person who involved in Goldman Sach’s Analysts

Program that worked under Institutional Equities trading desk in a middle office role.

4. You will see how people will thrive in fast paced and driven best result in environment..

B. Revise the sentences below by using “You” view and persuasive language.

1. I have considerable experience working within environments where customer service is

important.
You will need a considerable worker that have experience within environments where

the customer service is important

2. I understand how important customer service is to the continued success of any

business and I am personally very committed to delivering outstanding service.

You need to understand how important customer service is to continued success of any
business and because of that you will need a person who very committed to delivering
outstanding service.

3. I feel that the combination of my engineering expertise and people skills could be really
valuable within the corporate environment as I understand both the technical
challenges of the energy sector and the business impact of these skills.

You will feel that the combination of my engineering expertise and people skills could

be really valuable within the corporate environment as you understand both the

technical challenges of the energy sector and the business impact of these skills.

4. Throughout my life I have demonstrated strong leadership abilities and a willingness to

get involved and make things happen.

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Throughout my life, you will need to demonstrated strong leadership abilities and a
willingness to get involved and make things happen.

5. I am committed and tenacious, not only in the sporting arena where I have regularly
represented both my university first team and my country at tennis, but also in my
academic work where I have consistently performed in the top quarter of my course.

You will need a committed and tenacious worker, not only in the sporting arena where
you also need a person who can represented both their university first team and their
country at tennis, but also in their academic where you will need a consistently
performed in the top quarter of their university.