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by Celeste Denny
"although Atwood gives them a voice, that voice is never actually heard."
T ense T ense
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defense attorney
I won't mark it everywhere, but you need to watch your tense throughout
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He does seem to know, though, since he also checks The Odyssey as a primary source
I feel like the second part of your paragraph more appropriately fits with your second body paragraph
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Good quot es
Good Int egrat ion [and] P/V
P/V
Support wit h example
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P/V
Penelopiad Paper
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Nice work here.
Text Comment. Here I think I would even give Atwood credit f or what she does: In T he
Penelopiad,Margaret Atwood gives the maids a voice to express their side of the story that
unf olds in "T he Odyssey".
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Nice work here.
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QM Tense
Use present tense
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Text Comment. "although Atwood gives them a voice, that voice is never actually heard."
QM Tense
Use present tense
QM Tense
Use present tense
QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
T hough it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can of ten help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that
is logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your
reader to place a comma af ter that introductory element. Such phrases will of ten begin with
words like "because," "while" or "although," as in the f ollowing example: "While everyone was
f ighting, the bear wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be
conf using.
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QM Strengthen example
Strengthen this example. Look f or more appropriate evidence to include, and then clearly explain
why it supports your claim.
Comment 5
I'm not 100% sure how you are connecting this to the point you make earlier in the sentence. In
other words, why would being excused f rom killing the suitors also excuse him f rom also killing
the maids? Why would that be self -evident, since they don't truly belong in the same category.
Comment 6
Why is this signif icant?
Text Comment. I won't mark it everywhere, but you need to watch your tense throughout
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ultimately
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Improper citation:
Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to f ind links to inf ormation regarding specif ic
citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html
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Text Comment. He does seem to know, though, since he also checks T he Odyssey as a
primary source
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Text Comment. I f eel like the second part of your paragraph more appropriately f its with
your second body paragraph
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Comment 8
T ry not to begin each topic sentence with the same sentence structure
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QM Good quotes
Good use of quotes that help support your argument.
QM Good Integration
Great, f luid integration
QM P/V
Passive voice:
Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active
version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what
is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is
perf orming the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer
cannot avoid the passive voice, the more inf ormative active version is almost always a better
choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and
accessible.
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QM P/V
Passive voice:
Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active
version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what
is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is
perf orming the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer
cannot avoid the passive voice, the more inf ormative active version is almost always a better
choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and
accessible.
Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article a.
QM Good Integration
Great, f luid integration
QM ✔︀
Nice work here.
QM P/V
Passive voice:
Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active
version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what
is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is
perf orming the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer
cannot avoid the passive voice, the more inf ormative active version is almost always a better
choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and
accessible.
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