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Reflection Letter
After 273 days of High School, I am in awe that it is finally ending. Honestly, over my 9th
grade year, writing created a source of frustration for me; because it is, I have learned so much
more about writing. The writing tips that I have learned this year will set a great foundation for
Throughout the literary pieces we have read this year, they all seem to have common
messages and themes. Whether it be a theme of fear or friendship, the literary pieces always have
an underlying message that teaches the reader life lessons. The Penelopiad, for example, has an
underlying message: always speak the truth, or else the consequences arise worse than the initisl
consequences. In A Midnight Summer’s Dream, Shakespeare questions the reality of “true love”
versus “obsession”. These life lessons that I decipher from the books apply to my literary
assignments and I have remembered them throughout my 9th grade year. The messages and
themes teach the reader a deeper meaning to the story and about life.
For the literary analysis paper’s, I direct my writing to other 9th grade students who haven’t
read the books. I hope to uncover the underlying messages in the books and teach the readers
about these lessons. The books incorporate an underlying theme and a lesson that the protagonist
has to overcome based on their similar challenges. In the conclusions of my writing, I hope to
discover these underlying themes and express them in a way so people can learn from literature.
The revision process encouraged me to look at my writing in a new way. After receiving
great feedback, I reflected on parts of my writing that went well, and parts that needed
improvement. Often, the papers that I turned in consisted of similar recommendations, such as
the careful crafting of my thesis or the effective organization of my paragraphs. Depending on
the literary piece, I have learned from those challenges and effectively display improvement
throughout my revisions.
In the Things Fall Apart analytical paper, I refined my thesis, claims, and analysis to
make to a more precise argument. In this paper, my original thesis states, “Okonkwo’s
resentment and aspirations to be nothing like his father, ultimately causes him to live his life in
fear of weakness and failure”. This thesis states a fact, rather than an argumentative point. After
revisions, my thesis became, “In Things’ Fall Apart, by Chinua Achebe, Okonkwo tries to
suppress his fear and confirm his masculinity through his actions, but the underlying fear
ultimately causes the fragmenting of his relationships and contributes to the downfall of his
tribe.” My final thesis references specific points in the text while also presenting an argument
In my body paragraphs of this paper, I revised my paper to make clear claims and use
effective evidence from the text which then connects back to the thesis through the analysis. My
original paper lacked a clear claim and analysis; therefore, I revised my paper, so the claim
informed the reader what they are about to read and how it connects back to the thesis. In the
second body paragraph, I introduced a whole new point and evidence to strengthen my paper. I
also tried to eliminate the use of “be” verbs. Revised to connect to the real world, the closing
demonstrates the connection between Okonkwo’s challenges and the challenges of everyday life.
Overall, the revisions of my thesis and claims, evidence, and analysis create a more effective and
In The Penelopiad literary analysis paper, I used the suggestions on Turn It In to further
advance my argument. In the introductory paragraph, I improved many vague pronouns to make
them more specific and precise. Instead of using, “they” and “it”, I use specific nouns like “the
Suitors” or “Penelope”. This makes the paper more clear and precise. At the end of the
paragraphs, I adjusted my thesis so that it clearly states the argument. My original thesis was
composed of many sentences. My final thesis contains one, concise, sentence that effectively
presents the argument. In my body paragraphs, I worked to make them less verbose and less
repetitive. I eliminated claims that did not connect to my thesis. I revised the first sentence of the
paragraphs many times so that it clearly informs the reader of the argument while making an
effective claim. I tried to get rid of “be” verbs as well and replaced them with strong active
verbs. In the analysis portion of the paragraphs, I carefully revised the sentences to avoid
redundancy and passive language. Overall, the changes made to the literary analysis paper’s
For my creative pieces, I revised the Allegory Map Assignment and I wrote a chapter in
Christopher’s perspective for The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-time. For the map
assignment, I created a new map that was intertextual. In the map, I compare the challenges that
Okonkwo, Christopher, and Odysseus face. The map has three countries, colored in green. The
one in the bottom right is Nigeria, home of Okonkwo’s village, Umuofia. The one in the top right
is the Mediterranean with countries such as Greece to symbolize Odysseus’s journey. Lastly, the
country on the far left is Great Britain, the home of Christopher. In each country, “fear”, “away
from home”, and “change” exists in bold letters to emphasize the challenges that each of the
protagonists encounter on their journey. Each piece of land encompasses three quotes (one from
each book) that represent the challenges that the protagonist faces.
For “Fear”, Odysseus fears the wrath of the Gods, Christopher fears his father, and
Okonkwo fears becoming weak and womanly like his father. For these challenges, all the
protagonists must face their fears and be brave to achieve the end goal of their journey.
For “Change”, Odysseus must overcome the change of Ithaca by the Suitors when he
returns home from his journey. Christopher must overcome the change of his father and
adjustment to the fact that he told a big lie. Okonkwo must overcome the change of his tribe after
the Christian missionaries come to Umuofia. The protagonists of each book realize their world is
changing and they all act against it. Odysseus attacks the suitors, Okonkwo attacks the
Lastly, the “Away from Home” category symbolizes the challenges that the protagonists
face with being far away from their home. In the Odyssey, Odysseus cries on Kalypso’s island
because he longs to return home after many years. Christopher fears being far away from his
home in an unfamiliar place, alone. Exiled from Umuofia for 7 years, Okonkwo flees to a new
tribe. Each of the protagonists must overcome the challenge of being away from home and they
In the middle of the map, there is a triangle that connects all three land masses. Each of
rocket ship, and Odysseus is represented by a boat. With some of my creative skills, I was able to
engineer a poster board so that the figurines can move in a full circle around the map and they
can travel to each continent, representing the challenges that they face during their journey.
The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-time chapter, I wrote in Christopher’s style
and his perspective. In his book, Christopher writes by using very long sentences and sometimes,
they are run-on sentences. Mark Haddon, the author, uses run-on sentences because Christopher
sees all the information at once, therefore, there is no pause for him to absorb all the information.
When there are no periods in a sentence, it is hard to digest the information that you are reading,
just like the information in Christopher’s head. In the chapter, I try to use long sentences so the
In the chapter, I used specific diction and syntax that Christopher would use. For
example, I say “maths” and “I felt like I was going to sick all over the place”. I also used specific
facts and diagrams that Christopher uses to better explain what he is saying.
perspective and viewpoint of the book. I paid close attention to the literary devices used, such as
tone and diction, to emphasize the point of the District Commissioner. The paper that I am most
proud of in my Portfolio is my Things Fall Apart essay. I revised it to have a stronger thesis and
to have stronger verbs. Overall, the original paper compared to the final paper is representative
of how I have grown as a writer. With these revisions, my argument is stronger and proves a
point, rather than being weak and lacking a claim. I worked hard in this paper to eliminate the
“be” verbs and replace them with strong and powerful verbs that make the sentences more
powerful. I enjoyed seeing the original product compared to the final product and I feel as
though it encompasses the ability and potential of my writing, therefore, it deserves the award for
“proudest piece”!
One of the greatest challenges that I faced during the portfolio was making sure my
sentences make sense. Since I am the writer, many parts of my papers make sense to me but may
not make sense to the reader. I often do not recognize this, making my paper’s confusing and
repetitive. Like said earlier, I struggle with choosing strong verbs and making strong claims. The
verbs I often use weaken my paper and take away from the overall literary piece. I revised my
jumbled and confusing claims to inform the reader what they expect to read while also
reinforcing my thesis and evidence. Lastly, I often make sentences in my paper that present other
claims that differ from my thesis. Throughout this portfolio, I worked to carefully revise the
structure of my paragraphs. Overall, the challenges that I face throughout my writing make me a
I believe that 9th grade English has built me a great foundation for writing next year. I
have learned some tips this year that will help me with my writing in the future. For example,
while reading books, I will mark certain passages and quotes that I find interesting. This way, I
can use them in a paper after finishing the book. This year, I learned how to effectively organize
a paragraph with a topic sentence, claim, signal phrase, quote, analysis, and transition phrase.
That format will give me a great template to use next year when making a strong argument.
Lastly, I learned about specific writing styles and literary devices when I am reading books and
writing papers. I am now able to identify things such as tone, diction, similes, purpose, ectara. I
am sad for my 9th grade year to end, but I have learned so much that will make me a better
person. I cannot wait for the years to come. Thank you so much for a fantastic English class and
I really appreciate all that you have done to help me with my writing this past year!!