Visual Rough Draft

by kaitlyn holcomb

Submission date: 08-Aug-2019 09:17PM (UTC-0500)

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Visual Rough Draft
GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

100
Your introduction needs to conclude with a thesis that
makes a clear claim about the image you are
analyzing. Focus on the image and how it seeks to
persuade the audience, not on the topic the image
addresses.

Your essay is not about racism, it is about how this

/100 specific image tries to convey a persuasive message to

the audience it targets.

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Comment 1
I am not sure this introduction works for this assignment.

Comment 2
image?

Comment 3
I am not sure what you mean by a "racial gaze"?

QM No Contractions
Avoid contractions in academic writing

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QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence fragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such fragments become
problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. The most common version of
this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a noun) for a main verb, as
in the following sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare from dusk to dawn."

Comment 4
This term should never be used to describe a person. The accepted term is "Asian."
 Comment 5
Incorrect citation

QM del
Delete:

QM No Contractions
Avoid contractions in academic writing

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot have
more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that occurs
when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly by a
comma. There are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the comma with a
stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a coordinating conjunction
("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one of the two sentences a
dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating conjunction ("if," "when," "so
that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which," "who," "whom," "whose").

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QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot have
more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that occurs
when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly by a
comma. There are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the comma with a
stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a coordinating conjunction
("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one of the two sentences a
dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating conjunction ("if," "when," "so
that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which," "who," "whom," "whose").

QM R/O
Run-on sentence:
The sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

Comment 6
What do you mean here?

Comment 7
need citation

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
 Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is
logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader
to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like
"because," "while" or "although," as in the following example: "While everyone was fighting, the bear
wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

QM Del.
Delete

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QM vrg
Avoid very, really, and great

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Comment 8
Works Cited

Comment 9
Use hanging indention