Dear John,

I am really happy to have a chance to talk to you again after such a long summer holiday. I
hope that letter finds you well. After 2 months of preparationfor preparing, I am going to get
married with Rob next month. I hope that you will come and celebrate with us. Because you
are my best friend, I would like to have you to be best man. Our wedding ceremony will be held Commented [BKC1]: What do you mean?
on 18th of December when Vietnam's weather is forecasted to be quite cold and rainy. I think Commented [BKC2]: We cannot be sure that the weather
you should bring warm clothes together. Ohh, John. I have something to tell you, which I want IS cold, so it would be better to put “forecast” there.
you to keep secret. Because my husband is a famous person , I hope that you can watch him
out carefully. In that day, we will have a small announcement about my husband new album at Commented [BKC3]: What do you mean?
the following week after our day. I hope you can join with us.
I am looking forward to here from you soon!
Love you,
Quyen
Rated: 5.0
Bố cục bài viết chưa thực sự rõ ràng. Các ý chính ko có clear cut. Tốt hơn nếu có thể phân thành
các phần/đoạn nhỏ, mỗi đoạn deal with 1 question.
Mặc dù ko phải là compulsory, nhưng cô nghĩ thứ tự trình bày các ý nên đi theo thứ tự câu hỏi
đặt ra, vừa dễ cho mình ko bị sót ý nào, vừa dễ cho người chấm có thể follow được. Điều này
Quyên nên lưu ý.
Bài này của em fail thật sự, vì có 2 ý lớn, em chưa thể làm rõ được:
1. Có gì trong lễ cưới Formatted: List Paragraph, Numbered + Level: 1 +
Numbering Style: 1, 2, 3, … + Start at: 1 + Alignment: Left +
2. Miêu tả chú rể. Aligned at: 0.25" + Indent at: 0.5"
Thay vào give information về 2 ý này, em tả WEATHER, what to bring…
My suggestion: REWRITE IT!

Dear Anna,
I'm really glad to announce you about my wedding. It is going to be held in January 10th. I hope Commented [BKC4]: Announce something to sb/
this letter finds you well. Announce SB sth.

After 10 months dating, I decide to getting married with David that is my co-worker. I Commented [BKC5]: This sentence should come first, not
here
understand that he is a terrific man who always not only puts others first, but also be self-
effacing. With regards to the wedding I intend to hold in a three-stars hotel which is Commented [BKC6]: Decide to do

conveniently placed near my house. Although the price of services in quite expensive, the Commented [BKC7]: Though “that” and “who” can be
used interchangeably, in this case I would prefer “WHO”.
services are cost-effective and never fail to satisfied customersyou.
This occasion have has an immense significance in my lifetime, so I have an immense desire to Commented [BKC8]: Please revise the subject and verb(s)
of this relative clause and make them agree with each
receive your attendance. other.
I'm looking forward to hearing your respondents.from you. Formatted: Highlight
Formatted: Highlight
Love,
Haga
Formatted: Vietnamese
Rated: 5.5
 1. Cô muốn được đọc nhiều hơn ở bài viết của em. Tả người, tả đám cưới, nói lý do tại sao Formatted: List Paragraph, Numbered + Level: 1 +
Numbering Style: 1, 2, 3, … + Start at: 1 + Alignment: Left +
muốn mời. Nếu như chỉ dừng lại ở các ý như trong bài, giám khảo sẽ chấm theo tiêu chí Aligned at: 0.25" + Indent at: 0.5"
“Có mention main point nhưng các main points are poorly supported and can be further
extended. Formatted: English (United States)
2. Đoạn “what wil happen…. Em đang lạc đề. Người ta muốn biết các hoạt động cụ thể sẽ
diễn ra ở đám cưới, có gì đặc biệt hay ko, nhưng em chưa đề cập được. Formatted: English (United States)

Dear Blanca,
I am very happy because I am going to get married in next month, that’s why I am writing this
letter. I feel very lucky because my husband is a terrific person. He always puts me first. Commented [BKC9]: It is quite confusing in meaning. You
Whenever I get into trouble, he gives me useful advices. Therefore, I think I find a true love. We write this letter because you are happy for the wedding? Or
you write it to invite her?
will have a romantic wedding in 20th, January. Unlike the traditional wedding, we will have big
Commented [BKC10]: Nên có câu dẫn nào đó, bụp cái vào
wedding cakes with three layers and red wine. We will exchange rings after cutting the cake. đây, người đọc cảm thấy hơi hẫng em ạ.
Then, everyone will raise the glasses to congratulate us. Hopefully, you shall come to my
Commented [BKC11]: Chỗ này được xem là lỗi”RUN ON
wedding because you are the first foreign friend. You always tell me that you really want to SENTENCES” khi dung quá nhiều câu đơn. Giải pháp đơn
attend to the happiest day in my life. Let's write to me as soon as possible. giản: Ghép thành câu dài hơn.
Love, Commented [BKC12]: Propose a toast (Nâng ly)
Jenny
Rated: 6.0
Viết lại đoạn Run on sentences
Dùng more powerful words

Dear Mary,
It is very pleasure for me to invite you to my wedding with my family which will be held next Commented [BKC13]: Đây là trong thư FORMAL và viết
Sunday on 16th December 2018. đúng phải là IT IS MY PLEASURE TO

I come across my future husband in the bookstore. He has a great sense of humor. Besides, he
is very easy-going and self-effacing. Especically, he puts me first. He shares a great deal of Commented [BKC14]: Lỗi RUN ON SENTENCES giống bài
thing to me and spends a lot of time with you. Whenever I am in need, he is willing to give his trên, em đọc lại note của cô ở trên nhé!

hand. From my view, he iswill definitely be a wonderful husband. I will hoeld my wedding at Commented [BKC15]: You or me???
home. I hope that you will come and enjoy the meal with my family on Sunday morning. Then,
you will take me to my husband’s house. It is very wonderful if you can join my wedding
because I want you as well as my important othersbeloveds canto see my happiest time.
I hope you will come and join with me.
Love,
Hang
Rated: 5.5
Bài viết tương đối tốt, trừ chỗ run on sentences, em viết lại nhé!
Tuy nhiên, em mắc một lỗi rất trầm trọng đó là QUÊN MẤT 1 Ý CHÍNH “WHAT WILL
HAPPEN…”
Cái đoạn you take me… cô coi đó như là LÝ DO MỜI. Vậy nên, em vẫn thiếu ý trên. Mà cứ thiếu
ý là đứt phừn phựt đấy!
Dear Mei,
It’s been a long time since I wrote to you. How is your life in Canada? I hope that everything is
still well.
Now, I am writing this letter for you to tell a happy information. I am getting married next Commented [BKC16]: I would like to tell you/want to tell
month and I would like to invite you to my wedding. Maybe you don’t know my future you

husband, do you? My husband is RW who I met in my company. His characters create me an Commented [BKC17]: The question is unreasonable, and
immense impression, which is the reason why I love him at the first sight. Especially, he is a tag question is spoken style. You can write LET ME TELL YOU
SOMETHING ABOUT MY FIANCE…
smart, outgoing and handsome man whom I can lean on.
Commented [BKC18]: His characteristics made an
For giving us the greatest day, he has prepared everything as well as he can. In the morning, immense impression on me
we will hold our wedding in a large restaurant with a tasteful meal. In the evening, we will have
Commented [BKC19]: To verb
a mild party together. It sounds wonderful, doesn’t it? I believe that you will be regretful if you
Commented [BKC20]: Từ nào hay hơn?? Spacious.
are not there, Mei.
Mei, you are my best friend and cannot be absent at my wedding. I will be extremely happy
when you come here with me.
See you soon,
Ae.

Rated: 6.5
Bài viết tương đối tốt. Expand thêm một chút câu hỏi cuối cùng Why invite thì tốt hơn.
Dù là informal letter, nhưng ko nên sử dụng spoken style, đặc biệt là tag question em nhé!
Dear Erandika,
I am so happy writing this letter to announce you about my wedding in the next two weeks. Commented [BKC21]: Announce sb sthing
Firstly, I want to introduce you my future husband. His name is K. He is good-looking and quite
talk. He is working as an officer. You might think that he is a rigid man, but actually, he is a Commented [BKC22]: Lỗi Run on sentences, em có thể
sensitive man with a good sense of humors. After several months dating, we decided to get đọc ở bài viết trên để correct nhé!

married. There will be a lot of things I want to share with you about the wedding. It is going to Formatted: Highlight
be held at the church in my city. Then, we are going back to the groom house and have some Formatted: Highlight
ritual. (His family is pretty traditional).After the wedding ceremony, we are going to have a Commented [BKC23]: Ko để mở ngoặc như này, hãy làm
party at the most famous restaurant in the town. We have been friend for a long time so I really thế nào join nó vào câu trước

want to invite you to my special day. Moreover, we never actually meet in person before so I Formatted: Highlight
think this will be a good opportunity for both of us. Formatted: Highlight
It is such a pleasure for me to have you in the most important day in my life. I am looking for Formatted: Highlight
your agreement. Formatted: Highlight
Love,

Rated: 7.0
Bài viết tốt
Chú ý một vài lỗi ngữ pháp
Sửa đoạn run on sentences nhé!

Dear Sophia,
Commented [BKC24]: My pleasure
It is very pleasure to inform you that I am getting married on next Sunday. I would like to invite
Commented [BKC25]: Ko có một câu dẫn hay signal
you to share my happiness at the beginning of new lives. From my mind, my husband is chuyển ý, người đọc cảm thấy rất hẫng
wonderful because he always puts me first. If I'm struggling in life, he is willing to offer his Formatted: Highlight
hand. Moreover, he has a great sense of humor, so he frequently tells me funny stories about Formatted: Highlight
everything. That is why I want to marry him. With regards to our wedding, the marriage Formatted: Highlight
ceremony washas been scheduled for the 26th of December 2018, and the venue is Tara Hall Formatted: Highlight
from 8 a.m to 9 p.m. We also have numerous activities so it would be happy if you join me and Formatted: Highlight
my family as early as possible. Formatted: Highlight
I look forward to hearing from you.
Love,
Dung

Rated: 6.5
Bài viết tốt nhưng vẫn THIẾU Ý CHÍNH. Tự tìm xem là ý nào, bổ sung và viết lại

Dear Mary,
I am so glad to write this letter to announce that I am going to get married next month on 25,
July. You may be surprised when you receive this letter because I always tell you that I will not Commented [BKC26]: It may surprise you…
get in the relationship until I am thirty. However, all my promises have changed when sinceI
first met my husband. He is not only a handsome but also a talented singer, which made a Formatted: Highlight
good first impression on me. Now, He also owns an entertainment company and works as a
manager by himself. Our wedding will be recognized at a large and luxurious restaurant which Commented [BKC27]: Spacious
serves with many fabulous services and it has a breath-taking view. I intend to make a lovely Formatted: Highlight
video to memorize our sweetest moments to celebrate 3 years in love as a big thanks to this
special man. Especially, our drop-dead gorgeous bridesmaids will dress in red dress and dance Formatted: Highlight
the song " I do". Hope that you can join me and help me as a
bridesmaid because you are my best friend who is always besides me every critical moments. Formatted: Highlight
I am looking forward to receiving your respond soon.
Love
Van anh
Rated: 7.5
Bài viết tốt. Keep doing such great job!
Cố gắng hoàn thiện ngữ pháp nhé!

Dear Franci,
How are you? Thanks for your letter. I am so delighted because you always miss and think of Commented [BKC28]: Who is HIM?
me and definitely you are doing so well.
Commented [BKC29]: Revise the connection of this clause
I am thrilling writing this letter to inform you that I am going to get married in exact three to the previous part on the sentence
months after my birthday, September 9 this year. It happened when I was in a two-week
holiday in Da Lat. I would like to tell you something about my him. I got lost and was trying to Commented [BKC30]: What + NOUNS
find the way to the homestay until he gave me his hand and then we talked much. He is a bank Commented [BKC31]: Trước và sau THAT cần 1 mệnh đề
officer with good looking and galant and the most important that we match in conversations. hoàn chỉnh. Em xem lại câu này đúng chưa?
Everything he has now is from his efforts and determines which I admire and love him, not the Formatted: Underline
appearance. After all, That he always takes care of me day by day, make me feel like we are Commented [BKC32]: Perseverance/ Determination
destiny of each other. I seemed to forget to tell you his name, Duong. The wedding will be hold Commented [BKC33]: Always… rồi lại day by day
in my house and I would love to invite you come and share that moment with me and my
family. Because of the best friendship, I hope you do not mind coming earlier so that not only
we can decorate my wedding room for more colorful together but also you would go to my
husband's house. I really appreciate it. Please let me know, your presence is my pleasure.
I am looking forward to seeing you in my wedding party.
Love,
Trung Anh
Rated: 6.5
Viết tương đối tốt
Em cần xem lại để hoàn thiện MỆNH ĐỀ và một vài lỗi ngữ pháp.
Bài này dài nhưng có sự mất cân đối. 2/3 dành để nói về anh ta, how you met anh ta. Nhưng 1 ý
chính khác: What will happen… thì chỉ được 1 câu. Sự mất cân đối này cũng sẽ dễ làm chúng ta
mất nhiều điểm đó nhé! Formatted: Font: Avenir Next, Font color: Text 1