Beruflich Dokumente
Kultur Dokumente
This workshop will lead you through the essential stages of reviewing and refining your
work, help you make the most of your knowledge when writing and provide top proof-
reading tips.
Teaching Points:
1. What’s the difference – drafting, re-drafting, editing & proofing?
2. The editing and redrafting process
3. Strategic thinking: editing and redrafting checklists
4. Proof-reading: tricks of the trade
Closely related activities – aim is to identify problems and allow you to improve overall
quality.
Redraft
Redraft
Proofing = once content and
composition are as good as they
can be, it is about making sure that
Proof the work is ‘technically’ accurate.
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Activity 1: an Editing/Redrafting or Proofing Job?
1. Appropriateness of argument
2. Grammar
3. Position of ideas
4. Punctuation
5. Level of Formality
6. Order of sections
8. Word choice
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3 Rs = Reworking or Replacing and Refining content and structure;
ALL DRAFTS WILL NEED A FULL REDRAFT AT LEAST ONCE – ACCEPT IT!
Working in a pair, go through the extract to identify where things can be replaced or
reworked to reduce the word count whilst maintaining the meaning. This is known as the
Concept of ‘Brutal’ or Hard Pruning.
This essay attempts to evaluate the business model and e-strategy of web
based business Amazon.co.uk. The success of Amazon.co.uk will be analysed
through different services that it offers to customers specially focusing on
their online book service and z shops. It is based on the mixed research of
articles and literature obtained from different writers.
(136 words)
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The Concept of Soft Pruning – potential cuts are shown in italics.
Tautologies
Tautologies are using words together with the same meaning – so one is unnecessary.
Revert back
Unite together
Sink down
Join together
Follow after
Mutual cooperation
Advance planning
New innovation
Falsely fabricated
Ascend up
Collaborate (or cooperate) together
Penetrate into
Hoist up
Redundant words & phrases
These are words that do not add any useful information to the main verbs or nouns in a
sentence.
General public
Divide up; filled up; burn down; eat up
Discuss about
Important essentials
Reduce down
More preferable
Sufficient enough
35 acres of land
A number of examples
Circular shape
True facts
A team of twelve workers
Major breakthrough
Meet together
Small in size
Long-winded Sentences
Some students think that these are expected of them in higher education. Not so. Keep
sentences short and eliminate the waffle
Example:
The Panorama Software and Microsoft Roundtable organized a conference in 2004, gathering
leading minds in business intelligence and the analyst community, to gain expert consensus
on the topic. The aim was to encourage dialogue and discourse to focus on how business
intelligence can address key strategic challenges concerning customers, costs, competition
and change.
(53 words)
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3. Strategic thinking: editing and redrafting checklists
Maintaining an active list of issues/oversights to be checked for in any given draft helps
you to adopt a systematic approach to reworking your own papers in a consistent way.
Redrafting, editing and proofing can be made easier by, over time, collecting
your key areas for writing development into a single place.
These can then be systematically addressed for repeated drafts until you feel as
if you have caught as many of your typical pitfalls.
Here are two suggested formats for starting and then maintaining a list:
Process-driven:
Am I still clear what my Is it clear what main points I am Will the structure of my Have I checked for
purposes were in this expressing in each paragraph? essay be clear to the obvious mistakes in
assignment? reader? spelling, punctuation and
Have all sources of material grammar?
Is my topic clearly been cited and referenced? Have you defined any key
stated? terms in the introduction? Does the language
Have I used examples when express your arguments
Is there a clear central appropriate? Have you made explicit with appropriate force and
argument or point of connections between your conviction?
view in the Are my facts correct and up to introduction and
assignment? date? conclusion? Is the document written in
an appropriate style, e.g.
Do I feel I have Is there evidence of wide Do I make links between in the third-person;
achieved the reading in this assignment? one paragraph or section objective language?
assignment aim or and the next?
purpose? Are any quotations I have used Is the length and number
relevant and correctly Does each paragraph of sentences in each
Could I sum up my referenced? contain just one idea? paragraph suitably
central position or varied?
point of view in the Have I made clear which points Have I used headings
assignment in a were not my own? where these might help Have you expressed your
sentence or two? the reader, e.g. in a argument in language
Have I avoided bias and report, or non-traditional which is as clear and
Have I really answered admitted alternative views? essay? concise as possible?
the question/engaged
with the set task? Do my conclusions follow Have I used graphs, Does the essay read
logically from my evidence? tables & diagrams where smoothly and easily? (If in
appropriate? doubt, try reading it
Have I followed expected aloud.)
conventions in terms of
referencing, bibliography, etc.?
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Hierarchically driven:
Be clear about what proofing (checking) is and where it fits in the writing process.
Take a break between writing and proof-reading. Set the paper aside for the
night - or even for twenty minutes!
Proof-read at the time of day when you know you concentrate best.
Proof-read backwards. Begin at the end and work back through the text line by
line. This will force you to look at the surface elements rather than the meaning
of the paper.
Use resources. If you're not sure if you need that comma or whether to use
"affect" or "effect," look it up in a grammar book or an online language resource.
Make use of dictionaries to check spellings.
Ask someone else to read over your text and help you to spot errors.
Know your own typical mistakes. Before you proof-read look over texts you have
written in the past. Make a list of the errors you make repeatedly.
Place a ruler under each line as you read it. This will give your eyes a
manageable amount of text to read.
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Proof-read for one type of error at a time. If commas are your most frequent
problem, go through the paper checking just that one problem. Then proof-read
again for the next most frequent problem.
2. My sister liked to make sure all her video’s where in alphabetical order.
3. Its so hot outside – it’s a good job I brought that suncream in the chemist
yesterday.
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Activity Answers
Activity 2 – An Edit for Word Count
Here is a suggested edited version that greatly saves on words and avoids needless
repetition.
This essay attempts to evaluate the This essay will evaluate the
business model and e-strategy of business model and e-strategy of
web based business Amazon.co.uk. web based business Amazon.co. uk
The success of Amazon.co.uk will be and will focus on their online book
analysed through different services service and z shops.
that it offers to customers specially
focusing on their online book Before analysing the business
service and z shops. It is based on model, there is a need to explore its
the mixed research of articles and meaning, Timmers (2000) has
literature obtained from different defined the business model as: “an
writers. architecture for product, service and
information flows…” (p.46).
Before embarking on an approach
to analyse the business model, Although there are different kinds of
there is a need to explore the business models, they have one
meaning of the business model. thing in common: they are designed
Paul Timmers (2000) has defined to make money for their owners.
the business model as: “an
architecture for product, service and (78 words)
information flows, including a
description of the various business
actors and their roles” (p.46).
(136 words)
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Activity 3: Know Your Common Errors
2. My sister liked to make sure all her video’s where in alphabetical order.
3. Its It’s so hot outside – it’s a good job I brought that suncream in the chemist
yesterday.
4. Your You’re requested to remove muddy footware footwear before entering the
lounge.
6. He's so competitive that I always pretend to loose lose so we don't have a row.
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