ENGLISH TEACHING AND LEARNING ACTIVITY

Writing and Analytical Exposition

Grade XI Semester 1
Lesson 8 & 9 – 2 x 90 minutes
Gustinefa

SUB CYCLE 1

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1. Simple K1 T And we will talk about Persuasive.
k1
K2 T Any Question so far?
2. Broken Ro Lx (No Response)
halt T No, thank you.
K1 T Unfortunately, we do not have much time.
Simple +2 So, I really want to know you more, know you one
3.
k1 by one but since the time is very limited, the other
time we can keep in touch. Ou
dk1 T OK..talk about Persuasive, what is persuasive
actually? Persuasive, what for?
4. Broken ro Lx (No Response)
rph T Ya,, what is it for?why do you write a persuasive?
ro Lx (No Response)
a1:V T OK, I have a brief case that is uhm.. (write down in
dk1 the whiteboard) This one, “Corporal Punishment”.
You know this?!!
Irr Lx {overlapping}
defecti rp T Corporal punishment, anybody know?
5.
ve rph yes, what is corporal? Anybody can guess?
Ro Lx (No Response)
Clue T you know physical? So, Corporal mean physical?
bch Lx Ooow..
K1 T What is that? Physical punishment
dk1 T can you tell me some…how do people give
Simple physical punishment?
6.
dk1 K2 Lx Sweep
K1 T ya,
dk1 what else?
Simple
7. K2 Lx Kick
dk1
K1 T ya, kick…
dk1 T what else?
Simple
8. K2 Lx Smack
dk1
K1 T Ya, smacking
dk1 T what else?
Simple
9. K2 Lx Slap
dk1
K1 T Ya, slap…
dk1 T what else? Push up?
10. Broken
irr Lx Yaa..
11. Simple K1 T OK…the topic today is about Corporal Punishment

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 +2 right?
k1 So, you have know what is Corporal punishment
right?
K2 T Ya…ehm so the question is do you think that
Corporal Punishment is an effective way to punish
students or children who has…who have bad
Comple behavior?
12.
x K2 K1 L19 So bad
Cf T ya…?
Rcf L19 So bad sometimes
K2f T So, bad sometimes
K2 T Hi guys…what about you? do you agree that
maybe teacher or parents?
K1 L21 Yes mam,
very effective ….{unclear}
Comple Clfy T Very effective, he said that very effective. Why?
13.
x k2 Rclfy L21 Because it will improve their behavior…
rp T (repeat) Sandi said that by giving corporal
punishment student or children will get improve
K2f and be better.
That’s good reason.
K2 T (then pointing to L19) What about you? You said
that very bad. Why??
Comple
14. K2f L19 oh not really bad, but sometimes
x k2
Irr Lx {laughing}
K2f T Oh, bad sometimes,
K2 ok..(then ask to the guys) and now, have you got
corporal punishment? Have you experience? Yes?
Where n how?
Cf L21 here, at home?
Rcf T here, in this…??!!
15. Broken
K1 Maybe your teacher slap you in the morning to
wake up by using sajadah.
Irr Lx {overlapping}
cf T you get it? Sometimes ya?
irr Lx (laughing)
K2 T Ok..this student (approach Ss)
K1 L17 I think.. (inaudible)
clfy T Ok…that is bad, maybe for female to punish
Comple
16. someone by ….. especially for people who gave it?
x k2
Or the person..?
rclfy L17 The person who…(silent)
Check T The person who get? To receive it? Alright.
K1 T It could be wrong but we have to remember that
Simple
17. corporal punishment.
k1
+2 It’s not kind of abusive…abusive.
K2 T You know abusive?
ro Lx ....
Defecti
18. K1 T Bukan suatu yang…bukan kekerasan tapi yang
ve
slaping or kicking or smacking and others. But it is
not kind of abusive.
19. Broken K2 T Do you think American people who also pay
attention to this one? Do the government care
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 about that parents who punish their children by
giving physical punishment? What do you think?
They are liberal?
irr L19 (inaudible)
K1 T What they do, as far as its not abusive
Simple
20. K2f L17 as long as..
K1
K1f T yes, as long as
K2 L17 as long as it’s kind of violence so…?
K1 T as long as it’s kind of violence it must be stopped!!
Ok, actually I bring…it is an article…taken from
Simple what is it…ok, look at …In America they free to do
21.
K2 everything because it is liberal…is it true or not,
+2 we can see it later in this.
Or other people said, other students said that it get
attention from…? It can be controlled.
K2 T So, which one is true which one is true which one is
22. Broken wrong…(then T spread the article)
ro Lx ....
dk1 As we discuss before, Is it the first article to spank
+2 or not to spank ?
do you know what is spank mean?
Defecti Ro Lx (no response)
23.
ve K1 T you know, just slap or hit by using our hand that is
+2 spank.
So, it is debate whether spank is good or not for
children, for parents do their children.
a2:V T We can read it and discuss with your friend in pair
Simple +2 or maybe in three.
24.
a2 +3 You can see some difficult word.
You may ask your friend, you may ask me OK!!
Simple a2:V L31 Miss…
25.
a2 a1:V you…you haven’t got??Sorry..
a2:V T You can underline the difficult word, you don’t
Simple
26. need to understand everything word, just catch the
a2
idea, what the writer want to tell you in this article.
dk1 T (while the students were reading the article, T
Elliptica repeat again)
27.
l What is Corporal mean?
K2 Ls Physical punishment
Simple K2 L22 Explicitly miss?
28.
k2 K1 T Yes, explicitly secara jelas
Simple a1:NV T (T then go around to the students)
29.
a1
K2 T you get difficulty?
+2 What about you?
30. Broken
+3 is it difficult to understand?
ro Lx ...
31. defecti dk1 T The manner mean?
ve Rp You get the manner, there?
ro Lx ...

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 K1 T Pelanggaran hukum …..ringan.
Rp pelanggaran hukum ringan.

K2 T Any questions?
32. Broken ro L17 …
Cf T no, not yet.
Simple a2:V T why don`t you discuss with your friends, in
33.
a2 pair!
K2 T you get the point? You get the point?

Ro L25 …
Comple
34. irr L26 discipline
x k2
rp T wait, you get the point?
K1 L25 no
K2f T not yet.
35.
Simple a2:V T Try again
a2
Simple K1 T you know only a small…only a small number of
36.
k1 …… .
a2:V T Pay attention to this a time interaction.
+2 Yeah…not meaningful.
Simple +3 T yes, the first article to spank or not to spank
37.
a2 because we have very limited time, so just
come to the first article only.
a1:NV Lx (read the article)
Simple K2 T you get the copy?
38.
k2 K1 L15 yes
Simple a2:V L40 Mrs…
39.
a2 a1 T yes
K2 L40 Madeline?
dk1 T What is Madeline? Can you guess?
Ro L40 …
Comple K1 T to do it Madeline
40.
x k2 Ro L40 …
rph T yes, of there, is not to do, to what is it? To a
find.
K2f L40 yeah
Simple K1 Lx kita baca dulu terus baru kita lihat.
41.
k1 K1 Ls baca di rumah
a2:V L26 Mrs…videotape
a1 T yes, sorry.
42 Simple
Videotape………….., especially for …… yes, not
. a2
video.
bch L26 hm…
43. Comple K2 T ok, so what you get from this article? Tell me,
x k2 please tell me.
rp What you get from this article?
rph Ok, anybody can tell me?
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 K1 L40 whether they agree to spank or not.
K2f T yes. Ok yes there is a debate whether they
agree to spank or not.
Simple K1 T There is a whole article about.
44.
k1
dk1 T It means there are two…?
Simple K2 L40
45. two statements
dk1
K1 T two statements, two arguments
+2 T There is a pros and another one is contra
K2 T Hm… who knows?
46. Broken
ro Lx ...
dk1 T Why they agree with spanking, to the corporal
punishment, what the reasons?
K2 L26 stop bad behavior.
Simple
47. K1 T yes, hm…to stop bad behavior.
dk1
=2 It is effective way to stop or to change bad
behavior for children.
K2f Ok, that`s good.
dk1 Others? Why? …why? A group of people agree
that spank is effective.
cfrq Can you share your idea?
L31 …
rp T can you?
rpr L29 What`s the question?
rrpr T sorry?
rpr L29 What`s the question?
rrpr T (smile)The question is why a group of people
Comple
48. agree or to support spanking to e……as a
x dk1
punishment?
K2 L29 maybe, it is good way to make children
know….
K1 T their mistakes.
bch L29 yeah
K1 T their bad behavior.
bch L29 yeah.
K1 T It is good way that children know that they do
the wrong things. Yeah …their mistakes.
K2 T How about you? Any others?
49. Broken
ro L10 …
50. Defecti dk1 T Why people agree with this?
ve ro L10 …
Clue T There are two sides, posit, a dampen or to
Rp score is.
Why do people agree with this? Ok, is it
K1 effective way to change the bad behavior for
children?
So, by……by giving or by doing corporal

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 punishment the children really know their
mistakes.
dk1 And how about of people who do not agree
with this? Why?
K2 L40 that they children…….hm…..children
check T is it ok?
rph L40 children don`t understand corporal
punishment.
Clue T hm…, yeah if the children….if the children
don`t know what is corporal punishment and
Comple why their parents give do for them?
51. +2
x dk1 May they will get angry?
K2 L40 yeah.
K1 T could be, ada dendam or they will run away
from their home.
+2 So, they don`t know why their parents do that.
+3 Even though, that parents do because they
know the children to make the children be
X4
better in the future.
Ok, so we don`t need to do this.
K2 T Yeah…ok, and others?
ro L41 …
Check T no idea
ro L41 …
52. Broken
check T no, here…yes.
ro L8 …
check T yeah, yes. You say something?
ro Lx ...
Simple a2:V Ok, just say….just…..just….
53.
a2 a1:V L8 about bad effect.
dk1 T What is a bad effect?
K2 L8 maybe, the children get scare the punishment.
K1 T Ok, so this is the reason.
+2 Why people do not agree with corporal
Simple
54.
dk1 punishment, It will cause bad effect for the
+3 children.
K2f
They will get scare or depress….depression or
others.
Yeah, ok that`s good.
K1 L10 it will…it will needs them to do more have you
seen found their children, when they children
got spank, and their…..if their become
more…..
Comple
55. Cf T angry?
x k1
K1 L10 and they become angry, and they more angry
become worst.
x2 The parents will do more than spanking.
bch T yeah, spanking.

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 K1 T The people control the spanking.
+2 If me as parent, I have got 3 children, if I get
Simple angry with my kids because they do bad
56.
k1 behavior for example, and it could be we do it
+3
spanking.
Ini sebetulnya boleh dilakukan….katanya.
dk1 T apakah di sekolah boleh?
Simple
57. K2 Lx home…
dk1
K2f T yeah, only……at home.
K1 Not at this school, It is only at home.
+2 As for it is…..hm…as for it is control, it is
Simple privacy or it said that people….parents can do
58. +3
k1 that.
That is family business but do not do at
home….e…at school.
dk1 dk1 Why? Why?
ro Lx …
K2 L10 bisa ga Mrs sebagai violence?
clue T violence….violence…., Ok.maybe if you see
teacher do that, you can think you may do
that.
check Lx and we can be apply.
Comple K1 T and you will apply that, it is better not to do
59.
x dk1 that at school but only at home.
x2 So, there are 2 different opinions, there is
people who agree and other people who
x3
disagree.
x4
So, the way the writer write this article.
So, if we come to the text type or genreis….
We called that discussion.
bch Lx discussion

SUB-CYCLE 2

60. Simple K1 T discussion, this is exposition.

k1 =2 Discussion with there are 2 kinds of different,
you deliver the writer tells that 2 point of view,
agree and disagree.
X3
And then at last, he said that a receive
X4
violence against children whether in home or…
where is intolerable.
+5 He stay in position, he don`t…..he doesn`t
+6 agree with this, this is intolerable, Jadi di akhir,
setelah dia menyatakan.
=7 So there are three levels of government in
Australia.
In this case, the writer or this student want to
insist, want to tell the reader that three levels of
government are important.
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 Tidak ada yang tidak penting, semuanya penting.
61. Broken K2 T Ok, is it clear?
ro L ...
62. Simple K1 T Now, here... all of those levels of government are
k1 =2 insist to be.
=3 So here, they stay of this positions. =2
Menyatakan bahwasannya semua level
+4 government di Australia itu penting, tidak ada
=5 yang tidak penting. =3
And then i want to give a reason why, yeah. +4
There are number... This is for number of those
reason. =5
63. Simple a2:V T Let’s see this one!
a2
64. Simple K1 T So, he came to the first argument.
k1 +1 First, why it is important because the further
government is necessary for big things, so, big
thing in Australia done by federal government, not
local, and not state government but federal
X2 government. So, it is very important.
He give example maybe they keep their economy
in order and look after many things, like defense,
pertahanan, kemudian kestabilan ekonomi, semua
+3 itu dilakukan oleh federal government, ya... dan
banyak hal yang lainnya.
Then similarly, to connect the first argument and
the second argument, dia menggunakan kata
+4 similarly sama halnya dengan state government,
state government juga penting yah, to look after
=5 the middle size thing.
Seperti apa middle size thing itu? Yah, dengan
+6 memberikan contoh, the writer elaborete these
argument.
Jadi dia mengelaborasi atau mengembangkan
argumennya dengan memberikan contoh.
Elaboration can be done by give explaination or,
+7 what else? Dengan membandingkan juga bisa yah,
X8 ok, need elaboration, karena akan mempertajam
ide penulis yah karena argumennya akan semakin
semakin kuat dengan memberikan contoh atau
elaboration.+12
And then, finally local government look after the
small thing.
Local government juga penting, karena dia
+9 melakukan hal-hal yang kecil tidak sama dengan
federal dan state, tapi mungkin suatu, mungkin
look other thing like collecting rubbish, kalo gada
yang menjaga kebersihan, yang mengontrol
X10 kebersihan, otherwise even one would have
disease. Jadi hal yang sekecil, sampahpun diatur.
Yah... yang mengatur adalah local government.
Akhirnya penulis ini menegaskan the elaboration
does, oleh karena itu for the reason above we can
conclude that three levels of government are
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 necessary. Penting. Yah, semuanya penting.
So if you want to say the reader, you want to tell
the reader that you want to deliver an argument,
and your opinion is true, you need to support it by
ini, some arguements. Yah, itu akan memperkuat.

65. Simple a1:V T Oke, so we can see this one.

a1
66. Simple K1 T Disini dia mengatakan thesisnya, biasanya ada
k1 pada pem... pembuka, ya, kita`katakan dulu
dimana? pernyataan yang statementnya yang
X2 mana dan they say about position.
Dan bahwasannya saya mengatakan bahwa semua
=3 level of government di Australia itu penting, itu
posisinya.
Mungkin potensinya lain, yang lain mungkin bisa
berpendapat, tidak semua level of government in
+4 Australia penting bisa juga berbeda, tapi in this
case, the writer say that all the government ....
+5 levels of government are important.
Dan we need argument, argument to someone to,
it would be better to do it of each argument in a
paragraph.
Dalam sebuah paragraf, dengan memberi
elaboration, Yah... elaboration akan memudahkan
kita untuk meyakinkan pembaca bahwasannya...
argumen kita itu...
67. Defecti dk1 T what the elaboration means? dk1
ve ro Ls .... ro
K1 T Perkembangan. The elaboration, dikembangkan.
Dengan apa? Memberi contoh, dengan
X2 menjelaskan, dan lain sebagainya.
Untuk kemudian ada argumen kemudian
elaboration, ada tiga, kemudian yang terakhir we
conclude yah... we conclude for the reason these
we can conclude that three level of government
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 +3 are necessary. So, this is the way you write, an
analytical........ analytical exposition.
Hanya satu poin saja, tidak dua-duanya seperti
yang di koran tadi, when you read on the
newspaper, why everyone can see apa yang
+4 disampaikan, ini hanya satu saja, yah, ini is good,
to write your thesis, and say your position, and
+5 then you need to do maybe ada few preview here.
Bisa juga preview, ya... digunakan untuk
melanjutkan atau menjelaskan thesis report tadi.
Kemudian ada one arguement. Argument one
maybe. Argument two, three and others. And then
in the argument we need...
68. Simple a1:NV T (teacher write up the word elaboration on the
a1 board)
69. Simple S2 Ls elaboration.
a2 S2f T elaboration.
70. Simple a1:V T And at last preview, what is it? This one...? yap!
a1 dk1
(teacher write up the word re-iteration)
S2 Ls re- iteration
S2f T The re-iteration.
71. Simple K1 T Menegaskan kembali posisi kita tadi, kan, diulang
k1 +2 kembali yang pernyataan dia tadi bahwasannya
semua level government itu penting, ya?!
+3 Dibawah ditekankan kembali, diulang kembali,
Jadi, we re-state our position.
+4 Jadi ini caranya menulis sebuah analytical
exposition. Sebetulnya, ada yang lain juga yang
=5 disebut dengan category.
Yah, kategori eksposition nanti di semester dua
kamu akan belajar, dan discussion ini di kelas tiga,
+6 dan sekarang kita hanya exposition.
Bedanya apa? Linguistik? Kalau disini kamu
mengatakan bahwasannya pendapat kamu itu
benar adanya, dengan memberikan beberapa
argumen, kalau category exposition, kamu ingin,
+7 to persuade the reader untuk melakukan, apa yang
kamu, berdasarkan pendapat0pendapat yang
kamu sampaikan.
Mungkin terakhir, kalau disini hanya mengulang,
kalau untuk category? Kamu menyarankan untuk
melakukan itu, sesuatu.
72. Simple K2 T You get the point?
k2 K1 Lx yes...
73. Comple K1 T yah, so we are going to do... and ... to write... and
x k1 an analytical exposition text.
+2 Yah, kita coba berlatih membuatnya. Dan nanti
saya akan menganalisa kalimat demi kalimat,
berdasarkan systemic functional grammar.
+3 Yah, tidak perlu dijelaskan tapi that’s my opinion,
nanti akan melihat, berapa kuat sih kamu dalam
menyampaikan argumen itu? Yah...

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 Irr Lx (Overlapping)
74. Comple K1 T kemudian, how to hold all the world together, yah,
x k1 bagaimana membuat kalimat itu bisa coherence
terpadu, tidak terpisah-pisah, jadi gimana caranya?
By repetition of important keyword, dengan
mengulang-ulang kembali kata-kata yang penting
+2 seperti tadi.
We should conserve the (UNCLEAR) on behalf
ya...?! of your descendant as our son, at last as our
X2 descendant, ulang lagi yah!
Jadi dengan mengulang kembali, kata-kata dengan
keywordnya, kita membuat perangkat atau kalimat
kita, menjadi coherence, ok...
Irr Lx (Overlapping)
75. Simple K1 T kemudian bisa juga dengan menggunakan
K1 reference, yah, ini ... most snakest moves in
Serpentine crawl: they throw blablablabla.... dia
menggunakan reference, itu akan, akan
+2 memperkuat ya... coherence itu paduan dari essay
kita.
Transisional word, nah, ini dia. Ini penting sekali,
ini untuk membuat tulisan yang penting sekali,
bagaimana caranya? Untuk menyatakan kita ingin
menambahkan sesuatu, to show addition, kita bisa
+3 menggunakan kata-kata ini, dan dengan untuk
memberikan contoh, for example, for eat, and fact
specifically.
+4 There is blablala and others, to connect the
arguement menggabungkan argumen pertama dan
kedua, seperti contoh tadi, bisa menggunakan one
important effect.
Firstly if finally, itu membuat karangan kita atau
essay kamu lebih coherence. Kemudian logical
relationship... yah, ini satu, atau kalau tidak efektif,
mengapa hal itu tidak efektif. Ok?...
76. Simple a2:V T ok.... you do this one.
a2 a1:NV Lx (do exercise)
77. Simple a2:V T Tell the reader that you ere given, that... that....
a2 that it is the problem, ok ok.
a1:NV Lx (do the exercise)
78. Simple a2:V T Ok, you can do it in pairs or group of three yah,
a2 group of the three okey, discussing it L12. Oo,
sepertinya kita...
79. Simple K1 T Do you see it? Effective or no? For punishment, is it
k1 effective? No! So we can write those so the
+2 punishment is effective.
Ok, punish, like that, and write, the outline, why? It
because you said that it’s not effective, what is the
argument, why? See... one, two, three level.
80. Simple a2:V Write ini yah, jadi you will give example, maybe
a2 there is effect , fakta di lapangan.
81. Simple K2 L23 Bisa gini nggak Bu?
k2 K1 T by giving explaination, okey? Yah...

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82. Broken dk1 T What is the reason?
irr Ls (Overlapping)
83. Simple a2:V T Ok, you just write again, the point, first, jangan
a2 sampai menghilang poinnya itu kamu catat,
pertama make the reference, second one the
letter, and elaborate it, then give your fact, okey?
84. Simple K1 L9 just become more naughty.
k1
85. Comple K2 T How about you?
x K2 rph Do you think, yes?
clue yes..the point one
K1 L1 Because they can (inaudible)
K2 T Only one?
K1 L1 No
cfr T No ?
K1 L1 for the children.
+1 The parents will make the children understand
what the punishment means and they can try to
x2 someone else to interface.
It’s extremely different then before.
K2f T That’s good, good idea
86. Broken K2 T The second argument maybe? Ya..that’s the first
argument.
ro Lx ...
87. Simple a2:V T Think about the other argument.
a2 You can elaborate the argument by telling the fact,
by (inaudible)
88. Simple K1 T Because of the central reason.
k1 +2 Then you come to the first reason.
+3 First, bla bla bla. Then you need to elaborate the
+4 first argument, why.
+5 By giving example, or by explanation, by explain it,
+6 or by giving statistic.
And then the second reason why.
Non effective, secondly….fade away…
89. Simple K1 T (Inaudible) student is still slow.
k1 x2 That’s the statement, that the writer want to say
that reading habit among the Indonesian student
+3 is still low.
x4 There are many reasons for this fact.
Jadi kita harus bisa menulis di paragraph pertama,
+5 juga dengan memberikan outline.
Dituliskan semuanya dulu, tadi tidak seperti ini,
+6 tapi for some reasons.
Kalo disini disebutkan point-pointnya baru nanti
+7 ada argument pertama dikembangkan, ya bisa
juga dengan seperti ini. Ok!
+8 Here is the example, from this some example, how
you get some explanation.
+9 Let me tell you, you don’t need to say that we
disagree with the corporal punishment.
x10 But, yu lead the reader that corporal punishment
is not effective, ok.

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 +11 So, you don’t need to answer the question do you
agree or do not agree.
Eventhough you don’t agree, you can say that
+12 corporal punishment is not an effective way to
give to the kid, because bla bla bla.
+13 Or you need some introduction first, before you
+14 come to the statement. Ok.
So there is a good way to start your write.
+15 Jadi jangan langsung, hmm misalnya pertanyaan,
+16 do you agree with this or this one? No I don’t
agree with this one.
You are writing an essay, Ya karena kita menulis
sebuah essay.
Tapi, I mean, you can say that to lead people to
public opinion you can say that, it is generally
belief that, or you can start by giving proverb.
90. Broken K2 T Is it that this one?
ro Lx ...
91. Simple K1 T This is proverb here. spoil the child.
k1
92. Defecti dk1 T You know what is that mean?
ve ro Lx ...
K1 Ya, tidak mengukung berarti memanjakan anak. Ini
adalah proberb taken from (inaudible)You also can
start your writing, your essay.
93. Simple K1 T Ok, so you need introduction.
k1 =2 By giving introduction, it produces a good essay.
+3 So you don’t do directly, But the way that you do is
good, make it better, you can give introduction.
Ok.
94. Simple K1 T That’s a good introduction I think, before you
k1 (inaudible)
bch Ls yeah….
95. Simple K1 T I also give you
k1 +2 Later you want to lead people to
x3 So we can say this, that corporal punishment is not
effective to do.
x4 So it is some phrase that you can use to.
x5 So by using this, make our essay better.

REHERSAL

96. Simple K1 T (Next day)

k1 but hopefully, hmm the owner of this can read it
and tell the class what she, what they are writing
in this paper.
97. Broken K2 T Can you tell your friend?
ro Lx ...
98. Simple a2:V T Ok, just stay..ok tell your opinion about corporal
a2 punishment. Loudly, so Miss Putri can hear.
S2 L1 Corporal punishment is a method to punish bad
behavior of children. Physical punishment such as

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 spank, slap, kick and others. Actually, it happens
in many places in the world, but there are a lot of
opinions about it, divided into two sides.
They are opponent side and the defender side.
The defender say that it’s an effective way to
teach the children about discipline. However, the
opponent say it’s a kind of abuse the children.
they think that method can cause (inaudible)
The opponent say…unclear…there are some
written for it. First, we think that corporal
punishment is not a good method, because it can
make the victim get used to violence. And it
makes them ..unclear..to the punishment. So the
punishment will not affect them to be more
discipline. So they mean corporal punishment is
not the best method to be practiced children.
Second, it can make the victim depressed. If they
are depressed, they will feel scared to everyone.
And they they will think everybody want to hurt
them. If they think so, they won’t to have
relationship with anybody. They will know about
the real world, they will keep on bad thinking that
causes them more rebel than before. It proves the
corporal punishment won’t make children more
discipline, but make them more rebels. Form the
instance above, we can make a conclusion that
corporal punishment isn’t a best method to teach
children about discipline. It even can cause them
more rebel and not discipline than before. Based
on those researches, we decided to agree with the
opponent statement.
S2f T Ok (claping her hands)
99. Simple K1 T This is the writing of student here.
k1 x2 That’s very good essay I think.
+3 Use transitional word, you can relate the first
argument to the next one by using first pattern,
you say the contrast idea, that however and
x4 others.
It seems that you have implement the way that I
+5 have given to you yesterday.
How to make a coherent writing, but unfortunately
we can’t see one by one but I’m going to correct
your essay later because we don’t have much time
+6 to do it now, it will be better if we can do it.
Make sure about…unclear..you have clear
introduction.
10 Broken K2 T Have you write an introduction before the
0. statement?
ro Lx ...
10 Simple K1 T So from this essay, I think the writer gives good
1. K1 introduction before they come to the statement.
+2 It’s said that corporal punishment is a method to
punish bad behavior by using physical arms.
+3 So every reader know what is corporal punishment
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 X4 means.
So she try to tell the reader what is corporal
punishment mean, that is a method to punish bad
behavior of children by using physical arms,
physical punishment actually, Such as spank, slap.
10 Simple K1 T It will better if you said that by verb –ing, jadi
2. k1 dapat kita katakan seperti spanking, slapping,
+2 kicking, and others.
Karena ini jenis kata benda, jadi dengan
+3 menyebutkan slap, itu baru kata kerja, Slapping,
x4 pukulan, tendangan misalnya.
It actually happens in many places in the world.
x5 Yah, that’s good introduction, but there are a lot of
opinions about it which commonly divided into two
sides.
They are the opponent side and defense side, ada
yang setuju dan ada yang tidak setuju.
10 Simple K1 T The defender said that it is an effective to teach
3. k1 children about discipline.
=2 The defender said ya, yang setuju ya.
+3 Yang setuju dengan corporal punishment itu cara
yang baik untuk, untuk apa?
+4 To teach children a kind of punishment, to teach
children about discipline.
+5 However, the opponent said it is a kind of abuse to
+6 children.
x7 However, there is a contrast idea.
Jadi ada yang setuju ada yang tidak setuju atau
+8 ada yang tidak setuju ada yang setuju.
Nah, sekarang yang tidak..errr..yang setuju, atau
=9 yang tidak setuju?
Yang tidak setuju bahwa punishment menurut dia
+10 ya, a kind of abuse to children. Jadi bisa menyakiti
+11 anak – anak.
They think that this method can cause a
physiological harm.
Here, she agree with the opponent side and there
+12 are some reasons for that and she come to her
own statement that her agree that corporal
x13 punishment
Is effective, is it? … no, not effective, not
effective.
Then come to the first, she think that corporal
punishment is not good because bla..bla..bla..
OK..and then she try to conclude that corporal
punishment will not effect... Will not affect which
will cause them to be discipline. So that mean
that corporal punishment is not the best
method to practice to the children.
10 Simple k1 L1 Ga jelas, harus dalam bahasa inggris, di translate.
4. k1 k1 L2 Kamu baca yang itu.
10 Comple dk1 T Do you find a new one? Yes? What is it about? ya?
5. x dk1 rph What information you get from this?
rp What is it?
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 K2 L1 People need to adapt.
Check T Need time to adapt?
rph So government need to give time to adapt when
k2f use LPG
Good,
10 Simple a2:V T continue!
6. a2
10 Comple K2 T Get information? ya? What is that?
7. x k2 K1 L2 The conversion is effective..errr.is effective for…
check T So conversion is effective? ya?
rcheck L2 I`m not sure because I read based on the
newspaper.
K2 T Ya…any other? Can you say why it is effective?
K1 L2 They has data. The comparison of the price.
10 Elliptica dk12 T Ok, tell me! There are the comparison of the price?
8. l K2 L2 Yes
10 Comple K2 T Do you think the conversion from kerosene to LPG
9. x k2 is effective? ya? Is it an effective way to do? why?
What is your reason?
K1 L3 Mmh..save money.
Check T Save money?
K2f Good
So the government can save money: ya

11 Comple K2 T What else?

0. x k2 K1 L3 Practice.
Check T Practice? Ya… it is more practice,
rph so using LPG is more practice?
clfy Why?
rclfy L3 Just push the button.
rp T Yeah, just turn on the button.
clfy What about the safety?
rph Is it safety enough? Ya?
K1 L3 Yes.
clfy T No bom ya?
rclfy L3 Yes.
Irr Lx Dibi, you don’t open friendster Dibi?

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11 Simple K1 T Now we are come to other topic.
1. K1 +2 That I have told you before, that today we are
going to produce a text.
+3 Another topic.
+4 That is a hot news today in Indonesia, not in the
world, but only in Indonesia.
=5 That is the conversion from kerosene to LPG.
+6 Ya…hopefully you follow this news.
=7 Mudah-mudahan kamu mengikuti terus
+8 perkembanganya.
Dan now you have to tell the reader what is your
=9 opinion about this issue.
+10 Whether this conversion of kerosene to LPG is
effective or not.
So you can read some source and you can find the
+11 source from newspaper or in magazine or from
+12 internet or from another source..another source.
emmh..could be in Indonesia or it will be better in
English.
+13 But since the case in Indonesia, I think most or the
+14 media report it in Indonesia ya.. so we cannot
x15 use..err..I think it hardly find in English, except for
+16 jakarta post.
+17 It is ok if you find the material or source in
Indonesia.
+18 Just get the point, try to get the point that support
your idea.
x5 That is think that is effective or not.
Why? Because this one..this one..
If you think that it`s effective, find the good side
from the government or the good side from the
people.
Or the bad side fro government if you don’t agree
and the bad side from the people.
So, just get the point and elaborate by yourself,
ok?
11 Simple K2 T Have you get the news? Yes? Ya?
2. k2 K1 Ls yaa..
K2f T have you read it, Ya? Ok.
11 Simple a2:V You can discuss with friends in 15 minutes so you
3. a2 can exchange your idea.
+2 But, latter you will write the essay individually.
+3 So you can exchange your idea or opinion with
friend now by reading.
=4 You this one and other this one and then
exchange the idea, but you have to decide
whether it is said that you think it is effective or
+5 not.
+6 That is the first one.
If it is effective find some idea that support your
+7 idea, underline it.
And then to support your opinion it will be better
=8 if you provide a fact, ya..
Jadi opini kita boleh, tapi akan lebih kuat kalau
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 kita menampilkan fakta yang sudah ada di
masyarakat ya…ok?
11 Simple a2:V Get work! Now in group.
4. a2 +2 Why don’t you move your chair? Come on!
+3 Kalau enggak bikin grup seperti kemarin.
+4 Ok, we still have time..emmh..next month with
miss Putri, talking about article of exposition, so
you can do it individually next month.
+5 I think this enough to you to practice in group so
just do it in group, ok? Ok?
+6 Just do it as yesterday, come on, come on!
+7 It is effective or not, that the first one.
+8 If it is effective find out the source or sentence
that support your idea, don’t go anywhere, just
=9 from the text.
X10 Ok? Just decide whether it is effective or not.
So share! So latter exchange your idea, that you
think this one and this one.
11 Comple K2 T what is your opinion about it? Is it effective or
5. x k2 good to do? Ya? What is the reason?
K1 L4 reduce budget.
Check T ok..reduce budget ya?
K2 State budget? What else?
K1 L4 reduce pollution.
K2f T oh, that’s good because LPG decrease budget.
11 Broken K2 T What else?
6. ro Lx ...
11 Simple K1 T1 You can see from the government side, you can
7. k1 see from the people side.
+2 Keuntungan yang nanti akan didapatkan oleh
karena itu memang efektif.
=3 Kamu ingin meyakinkan pembaca bahwasannya
konversi ini memang efektif dilakukan atau bagus
dilakukan, dan dengan membaca argumen yang
kamu sampaikan orang berfikir, ‘oh ya benar!’
+4 Walaupun sekarang ada kontrofersi, ada yang
menolak konversi ini.
K2f Ln (Laugh)
11 Elliptica dk1 T2 Do you know gudeg?
8. l K2 Ln Yeah…!
11 Simple K1 T2 But if, you cannot do it, if you want to use..if you,
9. k1 you want to cook gudeg, you just you need like
+2 five hours to make gudeg.
+3 And if it is using gas, going to have, to spend lot of
gas.
x4 If it is relate to boiling some water, it is effective,
because the water will boil fast.
…but if use to boil something like gudeg, longtime,
it’s going to finish all your gas.
K2f Ln (Laugh)
K1f T2 Yeah…depend on the cooking!
12 Comple K2 L1 But…eeu…we can make rendang with…
0. x k2 cf T2 If rendang too…if rendang too is…

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 K1 T1 Use kerosene yeah…
+2 I like to cook rendang,
+3 but when I cook rendang, I use kerosene stove…
eeu…not elpiji.
cf L2 Electric stove maybe.
rcf T2 Electric. How many watt it is? One thousand.
clfy T1 I I mean kerosene…
irr Lx Make rendang sapi..
irr Ln (Laugh)
rclfy T1 owh…electric is…not, yeah because it seem…it is
too much, cheap, cheaper than…eeu…elpiji.
12 Simple a2 Ls Ss are writing their analytical exposition essay
1. a2 about conversing kerosene to gas.
(discussing) …overlapping.
12 Simple K1 L3 Yang penting tidak mudah meledak, tidak mudah
2. k1 meledak.
12 Comple k2 L4 Miss, miss, may explain which the good side or
3. x k2 the bad side?
cf T2 Which one you choose?
rph are you saying that kerosene, using gas is more
rp effective?
K1 You saying, that using gas is more effective?
+2 So, focus on the good side.
So that, the reader will think, ‘oh, yeah it is!’
12 Simple K2 L3 What if we explain the bull side, but at the end we
4. k2 choose the good side?
K1 T2 Yeah, but choose the weak, weakness part which
is not too strong.
x2 So that, yeah, you somehow like manipulating the
audience’s mind, something like that.
12 Broken irr L5 I’m sorry miss
5. irr T2 aagh…
irr Ln (Overlapping)
12 Simple a1:V L6 Ss are discussing…
6. a1 pokonya ekonomi aja.
12 Broken K2 T1 Even though, many problems come.
7. rph Yah ok, why you said it is, ok, why you said that it
is good to you?
K1 L7 Ekonomi.
K1 L6 Pokonya ekonominya deh daripada…
clfy T1 So, safety, safer?
K1 L7 Safety.
check T1 Safety, that more safety,ok! And then more
effective?
ch L6 Gak tau.
Ro Ln (No response)
halt T1 Ok, that’s it… much, more, much money and then
safety, distribusi that safety.
12 Comple K2 and then what else?
8. x k2 Ro Ln (No response)
cf T1 Do you think that is practical to use, to to do?
K1 L6 yeah!
12 Broken K2 T1 What else?
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9. Irr Ls (Overlapping)
13 Comple a1:V T1 T comes to the other group.
0. x a1 Because I like. Is it, a one…(read Sn’s work)…
Check Okay…so you come to the argument.
Rchec L8 The argument.
k
a2:V T1 Alright…make, make introduction or you can write
check a preview.
K1 Kemaren ada preview yah.
+2 Bisa kita tulis disini dulu, mungkin alasan kenapa,
baru kita elaborate.
+3 Kalo tiga ditulis disini, ada poinnya tiga ada
+4 elaborasinya tiga, nanti masing-masing yah.
Itu paragraph yang matang.
Kalu untuk paragraph yang masih sederhana
seperti itu, kalau pengen readernya focus.
check Ln Satu paragraph?
a2f T1 Satu paragraph-satu paragraph gitu aja.
13 Simple T1 T is speaking in front of the class.
1. a2 a2:V Nanti bisa mengerjakan sendiri,
+2 tapi karena waktunya tidak cukup, berarti bekerja
sendirinya nanti, next month, okey…
+3 Yah, diganti aja dengan analytical adverb, ok?
13 Simple a2:V T1 Ok, please sit individual!
2. a2 +2 I will see all you write an introduction.
X3 Yah, individual, just for introduction, ok!
13 Simple a2:V Can you arrange your chair! …yah.
3. a2 a1:NV Ls (Move their chairs)
13 Simple a2:V T1 Ok, how about you? Please move your chair…
4. a2 +2 yeah.
So we can see that this activity, this is not …
(inaudible).
+3 T1 One paragraph, so you can continue it later
because we don’t have much time, ok!
+4 Yeah, so from what you have discusses with your
friend, so write an introduction about conversion
some…eeu…kerosene to elpiji.
+5 Ya, piece of paper, piece of paper!
13 Broken K2 T1 And you, you continue, yes/not?
5. Irr T1 T is checking Ss’ work.
(Unclear)
Irr Ls (Overlapping)
13 Simple a2:V T1 Ok, come to introduction first, do it individually.
6. a2 +2 If you need my help i will help.
13 Simple a1 T1 T is talking to one of the students.
7. a1
13 Simple K1 T1 Ni Mas (unclear), you don’t have any pen?
8. k1 Ahh… it’s pity!
13 Simple K2 T1 That is a work that you doing in group?
9. k2 +2 Not, yours?
K1 L9 Yes.
14 Comple K2 T1 What’s your name?
0. x k2 K1 L10 Arya.
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 Check T1 Arif?
rcheck L10 Arya.
K2f T1 Arya, Arya, Arya, ok!
14 Broken K2 T1 You come to introduction?
1. a1:V Subsidy…
clfy L10 Subsidi in English?
rclfy T1 Subsidi, subsidy.
rcfq L10 Spell?
S1 T1 S-U-B-S-I-D-Y, I-D-Y. Yah, ok!
K2 T1 Why? Yes! Come on!
Irr L11 (smiles)
Ss are doing their work.
14 Simple T1 T is checking Ss’ work.
2. a2 S1 Uhm, the kerosene is difficult to find now, more
a1:V expensive than before, it mean the government
decrease, for the kerosene the government
decrease because they decrease the subsidy.
14 comple K2 T1 It doesn’t mean the government increase the
3. x k2 budget, right?
K1 L12 ……for subsidy people.
clfy T1 Mmm…for subsidy, for? Kerosene?
rclfy L12 Yes! That price is less than before because the
price of apa, minyak…
cf T1 Uhuh…the oil is high and then…
rcf L12 (Unclear)
K2f T1 I see, I got the point.
check Yah, so because of the, increase of the, the the
price of the crude oil, then the government
increase the budget to subsidy aa…people.
K1f L12 The price, the price still increase…
14 Simple a2:V T1 Ya, ya, but try to tell in detail, so you get the…(T1
4. a2 is reading S12’s work).
+2 I think it is a good way.
14 Simple Check T1 it is actually introduction, right?
5. k1 K1 Still introduction, and you can, you will tell the
readers, your reader that the government’s it work
to come, to overcome this problem by
X2 conversing…
+3 yeah…this is a good way!
+4 Yah, for some reasons.
Maybe we can see from the government and the
+5 people, community, then you elaborate in the
certain paragraph.
That’s good! Good introduction.
14 Simple a1:NV T1 T is checking others work.
6. a1
14 Simple K1 T1 T is speaking in front of the class.
7. k1 Time is over, so is that for you, we all, we have
very limited time
14 Comple a2:V but can you submit it to me later?
8. x a2 +2 Yah, as individual work?
clfy Or next week, Ms. Putri?
a1:NV T2 (Nodding)
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14 Simple K2 T1 You, you can finish it at home?
9. k2 K1 Lx No…
15 Simple a2:V T1 You can revise, you can edit yours, pay attention
0. a2 +2 how to edit your work, yah? I want from this
activity you really have skill to write on essay.
=3 So, not only because of for the test or for…aa..test
blog or final test. Not,not,not…for that one, but I
think…(fade away).
THE END

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