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Comments:
The stance is very clear and usage is appropriate in every section of the paragraph.
Academic writing as usual, NAILED IT. The paraphrase is also very good, nothing is
repeated.
o 3 parts of the essay – introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion – are clear
o paragraphs are clear: each one is united around one idea: relationship between
paragraphs is logical
o Paragraphs move between general and specific, and the topic sentences and
linking sentences (M and L) are connected
20/20
Comments:
All the things are clear, nicely done! The M is general and it’ moving to specific, also M
and L are all linked together.
Ø Cohesion: Sentence fluency (20 points possible)
20/20
Comments:
I can easily tell which part is evidence and which part is analysis by the different type of
stance language you used. The grammar structures are so intriguing and fluent that
makes the reader wanna keep reading.
20/20
Comments:
As always, you have a very academic tone in the essay, which makes it very professional
and logically clear.
o Essay is organized into clearly defined paragraphs and follows standard U.S.
academic format (double-spaced, 12-point font, student name, title, etc.)