WORKSHOP—GLOBAL‌‌REVISION‌ ‌

Instructions:  

Click on “File/Make a copy” to save this worksheet to your TIP Google Drive.  Before answering
any of the following questions, please read your classmate’s entire rough draft carefully.  Then
type your answers directly into this document.  The document will lengthen ask you type.  Your
work will be saved automatically.  

Take your time and answer each question thoroughly.  Remember to offer the kind of thoughtful,
constructive feedback you’d like to receive yourself.  When you are finished, return to the
Canvas assignment (Argument Essay Draft One) and submit your Doc link for the peer review
portion.

Essay Writer _______________________ Reviser  ______________________

1. What did you like best about the essay?  Why?

INTRODUCTION:

2. In reading the introduction, can you tell which controversial issue the writer has chosen?  (Yes /
No)  If so, which one?  ___________________________________  If not, suggest some ways
the writer might make his or her choice of topic more clear.

3. What is the writer’s thesis statement/claim? 

4. How could the thesis statement be improved to more clearly and concisely state the writer’s
overall stance on the issue he/she has chosen?

5. Is the thesis statement/claim the last sentence in the introduction and easily identifiable?  (Yes /
No)  It should be.  If it is not, remind the writer to fix this problem here.
 6. In your opinion, is the essay lacking any background information that would help readers grasp
the writer’s topic more quickly?  (Yes / No)  Suggest something the writer could add to the
introduction to make it more accessible for readers who are unfamiliar with the topic.

BODY:

7. Are the body paragraphs organized in a logical order? (Yes / No)  If not, suggest how the writer
could reorganize the body paragraphs, so his or her ideas progress from one to the next more
smoothly.

8. Does each body paragraph have a topic sentence that introduces the paragraph’s main idea? 
(Yes / No)  Make a note here about how the topic sentence could be added or improved.

9. Does the writer provide adequate evidence to support each topic sentence ?  (Yes / No)  Suggest
where and how the writer could add more examples or evidence.

Opposing View:

10. Where in the essay does the writer discuss the opposing viewpoint to his/her own?  Are there
ideas or points that you think the writer should have addressed?  Add some notes here about
how the writer could improve his or her coverage of the opposing viewpoint.

CONCLUSION:

11. Is the conclusion satisfying to you as a reader?  Does it persuade you, the reader, to agree with
the writer’s point of view on the topic?  Give the writer suggestions for strengthening his or her
conclusion.

TITLE:  

12. What is the title of the writer’s paper?  ______________________________________________

How could the writer make his or her title more interesting?  Does the title accurately predict the
content of the essay?  Make a suggestion about how the writer could strengthen his or her title.