it is claimed that animals and plants numbers are decreased all around the world.

specialists
believe this issue stems from a number of factors which can be solved by simple remedies. In
this essay, some of the main causes and solutions are considered and a conclusion is made at
the end.
The planet Earth has experienced a lot of changes as a result of human being greed.
Deforestration has a main role in destroying animal habitats. Unstoppable logging process
had lead to extinction in both animals and plants. For instance, Amazon jungles has lost about
2/3 of its animals and plants just as a result of unnecessary constructions. Even if the animals
and plants survived, there would not be any environment or nutritions available for them.
Further more, contaminated sources of water has an eyecatching impact on fauna and wild
life. Water has a significant role even more than poaching and when it is polluted none of the
animals or plants can barely stay alive. Some animals become poisioned by drinking polluted
water.
Environmentalist has reached to a compromise that restricted humanbeing activities in some
special areas may lessen the negative impact of these destructions. Voracious human
activities should be banned in places which is the undoubted realm of animals and plants. For
example, in South Africa it is against the law if people hunt in wildlife and a very high amount
of fine is considered for such actions. Another solution is that industries should avoid leaving
their debris in water. Although, industrial littering in water is by no means accepted by the
people nor governments, some of them still do this. If the industries stopped spreading their
waste in nature like what people in Japan did, we could see a meaningful increase in number
of animals and plant.
To conclude, preserving animals and plants is our duty. I believe that with announcing serious
laws about limited activities in nature and recyclining the industrial waste, the number of
animals and plants will increase hopefully.
TASK 2
Task result 2
Coherence And Cohesion,Cohesive_devices :
Issue : You have managed to use some basic linking words correctly but there has to be more
variety like task 1
Remedy : Use more cohesive devices to connect your sentences and also better grammar
structures including complex ones to keep the flow of your work

Coherence And Cohesion,Organization :

Issue : You have shown the ideas organised but I need to see paragraphing which has not
happened, and at times you have used them mechanically. Since there is clear paragraphing
you get a 5.
Remedy : This can get better using a line blank between each paragraph.

Coherence And Cohesion,Paragraphing :

Issue : You have shown organisation but as for paragraphing as mentioned above, I need to see
them clearly separated on the office automatically it shows the paragraphs though.
Remedy : Leave a line blank to show your paragraphs

Grammar And Accuracy,Errors :

Issue : Your simple sentences are accurate and you have used some compound structures
accurately, focus on complex structures
Remedy : Review your work before submission to make sure you have corrected the errors

Grammar And Accuracy,Range :

Issue : The range is varied and accurate, more complex structures are required
Remedy : work on the variety of structures to be able to show the range

Lexical Resource,Errors :
Issue : You have used them accurately, but better word choice can get you a higher band score -
eg. collocations, idiomatic language.
Remedy : Maybe work more on expanding the range

Lexical Resource,Precision :
Issue : As stated above although not very sophisticated words have been used, you have used
them accurately and some good words have been chosen, well done.
Remedy : Work on its range, esp collocations and idiomatic language as mentioned above

Lexical Resource,Range :
Issue : The range is limited and not a variety of idiomatic language has been used
Remedy : Vocabulary for IELTS or collocations in Use can help you with this.

Task Response,details :
Issue : You have sufficiently addressed the task, the ideas have been supported and you have
met the word limit. State the main reason, support it and then give an example, without an
example you cannot get higher scores.
Remedy : Giving a more specific example for each main idea can get you a higher band score

Task Response,overview :
Issue : You have briefly mentioned the overview, include the thesis statement always in your
intro, you have done well in this regard.
Remedy : well done.