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We are learning to analyse the way a writer

makes a description interesting.
Êwo of the most effective techniques you
can use when describing a scene are:

Active, interesting verbs ± µdoing¶ words

that pack a punch.

Êhe five senses ± sight, smell, touch,

taste, sound.
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Êhe vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe
in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of
spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water
flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who
clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. Êhe taste of salt coated
their throats. Êhey cried out to each other, but the wind stole their
words away. Êhe sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to
shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and
whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind
howled and the rain battered down all around them.
Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. Êhe men slowly
came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above
them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they
had survived such a violent night.
O
    
Êhe vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe
in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of
spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water
flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who
clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. Êhe taste of salt coated
their throats. Êhey cried out to each other, but the wind stole their
words away. Êhe sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to
shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and
whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind
howled and the rain battered down all around them.
Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. Êhe men slowly
came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above
them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they
had survived such a violent night.
O
    
Êhe vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe
in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of
spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water
flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who
clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. Êhe taste of salt coated
their throats. Êhey cried out to each other, but the wind stole their
words away. Êhe sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to
shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and
whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind
howled and the rain battered down all around them.
Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. Êhe men slowly
came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above
them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they
had survived such a violent night.
O
  
   
Êhe vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe
in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of
spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water
flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who
clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. Êhe taste of salt coated
their throats. Êhey cried out to each other, but the wind stole their
words away. Êhe sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to
shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and
whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind
howled and the rain battered down all around them.
Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. Êhe men slowly
came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above
them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they
had survived such a violent night.
O
  
   
Êhe vessel had been sitting in the water calmly, rocking like a babe
in arms. Now, it lurched and creaked painfully, sending shocks of
spray up from the prow of the ship. Great bullying smacks of water
flung themselves over the side of the boat, drenching the men, who
clung to the sides like limpets on a rock. Êhe taste of salt coated
their throats. Êhey cried out to each other, but the wind stole their
words away. Êhe sea rose and shuddered like a wild horse trying to
shake off its rider. Past exhaustion, the men slumped and
whimpered even as they gripped on for dear life, whilst the wind
howled and the rain battered down all around them.
Sometime before dawn, the ocean was soothed. Êhe men slowly
came to, and as the rose-yellow sky warmed and unfurled above
them, they peered at each other, astonished, unable to believe they
had survived such a violent night.
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! lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where ! slept sounder
than ever ! remembered to have done in my life, and, as ! reckoned, about nine
hours; for when ! awaked, it was just day-light. ! attempted to rise, but was not
able to stir: for, as ! happened to lie on my back, ! found my arms and legs were
strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and
thick, tied down in the same manner. ! likewise felt several slender ligatures
across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. ! could only look upwards; the
sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. ! heard a confused noise
about me; but in the posture ! lay, could see nothing except the sky. !n a little time
! felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over
my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as
much as ! could, ! perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a
bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. !n the mean time, ! felt at
least forty more of the same kind (as ! conjectured) following the first. ! was in the
utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and
some of them, as ! was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by
leaping from my sides upon the ground.
O
    
! lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where ! slept sounder
than ever ! remembered to have done in my life, and, as ! reckoned, about nine
hours; for when ! awaked, it was just day-light. ! attempted to rise, but was not
able to stir: for, as ! happened to lie on my back, ! found my arms and legs were
strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and
thick, tied down in the same manner. ! likewise felt several slender ligatures
across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. ! could only look upwards; the
sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. ! heard a confused noise
about me; but in the posture ! lay, could see nothing except the sky. !n a little time
! felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over
my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as
much as ! could, ! perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a
bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. !n the mean time, ! felt at
least forty more of the same kind (as ! conjectured) following the first. ! was in the
utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and
some of them, as ! was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by
leaping from my sides upon the ground.
O
    
! lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where ! slept sounder
than ever ! remembered to have done in my life, and, as ! reckoned, about nine
hours; for when ! awaked, it was just day-light. ! attempted to rise, but was not
able to stir: for, as ! happened to lie on my back, ! found my arms and legs were
strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and
thick, tied down in the same manner. ! likewise felt several slender ligatures
across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. ! could only look upwards; the
sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. ! heard a confused noise
about me; but in the posture ! lay, could see nothing except the sky. !n a little time
! felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over
my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as
much as ! could, ! perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a
bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. !n the mean time, ! felt at
least forty more of the same kind (as ! conjectured) following the first. ! was in the
utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and
some of them, as ! was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by
leaping from my sides upon the ground.
O
   
   
! lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where ! slept sounder
than ever ! remembered to have done in my life, and, as ! reckoned, about nine
hours; for when ! awaked, it was just day-light. ! attempted to rise, but was not
able to stir: for, as ! happened to lie on my back, ! found my arms and legs were
strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and
thick, tied down in the same manner. ! likewise felt several slender ligatures
across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. ! could only look upwards; the
sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. ! heard a confused noise
about me; but in the posture ! lay, could see nothing except the sky. !n a little time
! felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over
my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as
much as ! could, ! perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a
bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. !n the mean time, ! felt at
least forty more of the same kind (as ! conjectured) following the first. ! was in the
utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and
some of them, as ! was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by
leaping from my sides upon the ground.
O
   
   
! lay down on the grass, which was very short and soft, where ! slept sounder
than ever ! remembered to have done in my life, and, as ! reckoned, about nine
hours; for when ! awaked, it was just day-light. ! attempted to rise, but was not
able to stir: for, as ! happened to lie on my back, ! found my arms and legs were
strongly fastened on each side to the ground; and my hair, which was long and
thick, tied down in the same manner. ! likewise felt several slender ligatures
across my body, from my arm-pits to my thighs. ! could only look upwards; the
sun began to grow hot, and the light offended my eyes. ! heard a confused noise
about me; but in the posture ! lay, could see nothing except the sky. !n a little time
! felt something alive moving on my left leg, which advancing gently forward over
my breast, came almost up to my chin; when, bending my eyes downwards as
much as ! could, ! perceived it to be a human creature not six inches high, with a
bow and arrow in his hands, and a quiver at his back. !n the mean time, ! felt at
least forty more of the same kind (as ! conjectured) following the first. ! was in the
utmost astonishment, and roared so loud, that they all ran back in a fright; and
some of them, as ! was afterwards told, were hurt with the falls they got by
leaping from my sides upon the ground.
 

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Oown to the bottom Space

of the sea
mn your worksheet, start to collect ideas
for the sorts of verb you might use to describe
your journey ± don¶t forget, keep them active
and interesting.

Plunge
Rush
Swoop
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Share some ideas for your incredible journey.

Where are you going?
What does it feel like?