The Beast of Bodmin

Moor

Analysing writers’ effect

 Marking Criteria

Mostly gives Candidate understands

Explanations are given how language works
meanings of
of appropriately
words
selected words and Demonstrate the
phrases writer’s reasons

Some evidence the

candidate understands how High quality
language works comments

Tackles imagery with

Explanations may be few, general, slight precision and imagination
or only partially effective (even though
literary devices are identified correctly)

Attempt to suggest and explain

effects is basic, vague, very general

Wide ranging and

Response may repeat the language closely focused
of the original discussion of language

Writers’ Effects 2
 Marking criteria

Band 1 9–10 Wide ranging and closely focused discussion of language with some high quality
comments that add associations to words in both parts of the question, and
demonstrate the writer’s reasons for using them. Tackles imagery with some
precision and imagination. There is clear evidence that the candidate
understands
how language works.

Band 2 7–8 Explanations are given of appropriately selected words and phrases, and effects
are identified in both parts of the question. Images are recognised as such and
the response goes some way to explaining them. There is some evidence that
the candidate understands how language works.

Band 3 5–6 A satisfactory attempt is made to identify appropriate words and phrases.
The response mostly gives meanings of words and any attempt to suggest and
explain effects is basic, vague or very general. One half of the question may be
better answered than the other.

Band 4 3–4 The response provides a mixture of appropriate choices and words that
communicate less well. The response may correctly identify linguistic or literary
devices but not explain why they are used. Explanations of meaning may be
few, general, slight or only partially effective. They may repeat the language of
original or do not refer to specific words.

Band 5 1–2 The choice of words is insufficient or rarely relevant. Any comments are
inappropriate and the response is very thin.

Band 6 0 The response does not relate to the question. Inappropriate words and phrases
are chosen or none are selected.

Writers’ Effects 3
 The appearance of the farmer and his farm

A little further along she took a turning with a

handwritten sign pointing to ‘Gables Farm’. She had to
leave the car and cross a rickety, rotting footbridge over a
rushing stream. Another battered sign, nailed to a tree,
bore the ominous words, ambiguously addressed: ‘Wild
Big Cats – Keep Out’. A shiny, weather-beaten man with
tremendous whiskers and a crusty hat the colour of an
over-cooked pie appeared at the farm gate, carrying a
rifle. When she explained she was lost and had just had
an unnerving experience, he took her into his kitchen and
sat her down at a stained oak table while he made tea
and talked about the beast.

Select three powerful words and phrases that include

imagery. Explain how each word or phrase is used
effectively.

Writers’ Effects 4
 The appearance of the farmer and his farm

Connection to Overall
Abstract Noun
Quote Definition (technical terms) Effect paragraph
Feeling or Mood
Excerpt
red and sweaty in stress, over-exposure to indication of spending
‘shiny’
appearance the weather time in the nature

Writers’ Effects 5
The appearance of the farmer and his farm

Time to write!

10 minutes

Writers’ Effects 6
The appearance of the farmer and his farm

Peer assessment – 10 minutes!

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Writers’ Effect 8